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Wren
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since 2000-07-05
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0 posted 2000-07-08 10:18 PM




I will never be an atheist while looking in your eyes
For the first time I can belive in something
that is not
myself
If I take the time
to listen
your heart beat drowns out
my mothers prayers
A string of kisses
Annoint pressure points
Bleeding thick sticky
passion
What are these wounds?
You bite me
Then lick my cut flesh
You press my mouth hard
with the palm of your hand
As your eyes wisper
Be still
Be still and know that I am God

Note: The last line is not mine....I stole it from a song I sang at church....I thought it fit very well, so I used it. I'm sorry, I don't know exactaly where it came from, but I mean to find out.

© Copyright 2000 Wren - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2000-07-08 10:29 PM


Oh that was great, I think the first line hit me the hardest. Loved it!!



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2000-07-08 10:31 PM


Don't apologize for the best line in the poem! Really, I loved all of it.

Kathleen

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
3 posted 2000-07-09 05:34 AM


This is an intriguing piece. You could be talking about a lover  or a mystical vision. Very impressive!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


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