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Wren
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since 2000-07-05
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0 posted 2000-07-07 11:03 AM



New
Green place
Apart from any emotion
Wrapped in warm arms
Hold me
Lover
Ocean by any other name
I'm calm in the lapping of your waves
Calm, and for a moment
free
Free(the word slides sweetly through my mouth)
Surely I will drown in you
But I have no remorse
Or guilt for that matter
As I so carelessly leave this world
through the door through which I came-
Sinking into your cool green womb
I cry your name
Not mother
Father
Not child
but glimmer-in-your-eye
but nothing
nothing

© Copyright 2000 Wren - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
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1 posted 2000-07-07 11:08 AM


Terrific poem!    Means so much - can mean so much - many differing variables!

free
Free(the word slides sweetly through my mouth)
Surely I will drown in you


Particulary liked these!  Free is such a beautiful word!  

Enjoyed reading your poem very much.

Rex
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
2 posted 2000-07-07 11:41 AM


Very, very nice...enjoyed the imagery and emotional direction.

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-

kaile
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3 posted 2000-07-08 03:14 AM


intriguing piece..this reader is left wondering just what this "green womb" can be...hmmm...like the calm tranquil tone here though i suspect that if one reads between the lines, there is subtle bleak darkness underneath
lotharingia
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saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-07-08 03:57 AM


What a stunning mystical piece! It allows many interpretations, as Tara, says. Sublime.
It reminded me a bit of Octavio Paz.

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


SpitFire
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5 posted 2000-07-08 03:52 PM


~Wren,..."aahhh" *Soft sigh*,...that's how this one left me.  "Surely I will drown in you",...mmm, love this line. Awesome. *Peace.

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The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-07-08 07:06 PM


I liked this poem also, and am left wondering the true meaning. Lyrical words. Felt happy and sad at once.



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

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