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Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
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New Hampshire

0 posted 2000-07-06 11:20 PM




Sitting, sometimes thinking
of a place....
Today I felt a part of the Ocean
Waves. I can feel myself on the edge..a beautiful view..Im going to swim, and swim, and get to where I want to be. Im rolling on my raft of life, gently, back and forth. My hands reach down into the cool water, I begin to paddle. Further and further I go, Im making strides and here it comes...The wave, it tosses me around, I lose sight of my horizon..my eyes stinging from the salt water or maybe of my own tears. Ive been washed back to shore to start all over. I never leave my raft of life, Im part of this ocean. I must paddle harder, I must break through the waves, never losing sight of my horizen. Today the ocean and I are one.

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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-07 05:30 AM


beautiful poem with beautiful imagery. well done!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-07 08:15 AM


Oh, was that you I saw out there, was I was paddling so hard and going in circles?  Lovely words, Deb, and a true feeling.
S



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

3 posted 2000-07-07 10:28 AM


Wow. I think you've just inspired me! I love this poem! Really good!
Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
4 posted 2000-07-07 05:01 PM



Well written, excellent imagery, and I loved the use of the ocean as a metaphor  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

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