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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396


0 posted 2000-07-06 05:40 PM


Didn't Want But Did

I don't want to write about where I am right now.
I don't want you to care,
to share and flair your skintight jeans.
I don't want you to hear me cry.
Don't want you to know why, or believe, deceive.
I don't want you to see my bruises,
don't want you to fall, to stall on love.
I don't want you to tenderize me,
polish the edges from their rough.
I do want you to fasten the loops,
and take the troops and go.
I do want you to escape my wrath,
I've  burnt my path, my stained road.
I do want you to release the passion,
in it's hottest fashion, to the sky, to the sky.
I do want you to grin with the munchkins by the sea,
it's me, this time, it's me...set you free.
I do want selfish fish for dinner and tickles in the grass.
But it was me. Who didn't want but did.



© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
ChibiDeathscythe
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

1 posted 2000-07-06 05:48 PM


Wow....this has a really nice flow. I loved it. What intriguing word pictures you paint, SpitFire
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2000-07-06 07:25 PM


Packs a wallop Spitfire. Sure does. Yep!
Lots of resolution and emotion in there. Yep! Yep! And I liked it a whole bunch...yep! yep! yep!

"But it was me who didn't want and did."

I think that says it for eveyone.

jwesley

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-07-06 07:47 PM


SpitFire....you just keep cranking out these totally beautiful poems....with such imagery, such a message...Don't let college ruin you...don't ever change.  Hardrock
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-07-06 10:03 PM


Well, as usual, I love your stuff. "I've burnt my path, my stained road", what a great line. I think we are both having some similar things happening..Thanks for reading all my poems, too.  
Catalinamoon



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-07-07 05:01 AM


I was keen on that line, too. And the others as well, of course! I love the idea behind the poem, doing something you know you shouldn't. I can relate to that!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


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