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demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun

0 posted 2000-07-04 11:06 PM


The City ...

Mud splatters my bare feet
Stars shine in darkened skies
As I walk to where we used to meet
The night echoes some waif's cries.

I see the pavements lumpy with logs
Huddled against the cold night chill
Humanity interspersed with dogs
Carrion awaiting vultures will

The stench of decay fills my soul
Like tangible shadows invading me
Questions whirl; I approach my goal
The now solitary Tamarind Tree

Dim memories of a long forgotten grove
Of verdant sunlit waving leaves
Fleet through my mind; my eyes rove
For the spot, which still it's magic weaves

My feet softly caress the hallowed soil
As they have done these many years
Then must I return to again toil
To forget your memory through tears

And become one with the City for another night
And live with the City through another day
The City where my kin are common sight
The City that gives and then takes away



© Copyright 2000 Deepak Menon - All Rights Reserved
Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
1 posted 2000-07-04 11:21 PM


Nicely written.

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
2 posted 2000-07-04 11:22 PM


Nicely written.

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-07-05 12:37 PM


You have again so well expressed the pain of memories, and the longevity of the feelings when you have loved, even though they are gone.
Catalinamoon

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-07-05 03:47 PM


well i enjoyed this one alot so please do keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

5 posted 2000-07-05 03:55 PM


~I am here in awe and impressed. Marvelous descriptions. Take care. *Peace.
Rex
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
6 posted 2000-07-05 04:27 PM


Another good one Deepak!
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
7 posted 2000-07-05 07:37 PM


Deepak...you have your city, I have mine.  As I read, I was transported back to that city...to a place, not a Tamarind tree, but a little shop...and I felt the lonliness.  Excellent....Hardrock
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