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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-07-04 07:15 PM


It feels as if my eyes are being poked from the inside out
Burning balls of fire hanging by a thread
Inside my still and heavy head
I cannot feel me blinking
There's not a thing of importance I'm thinking
And one solitary hair
Dangles against my cheek
As it has been there since I have got here....

It's got to have been weeks.


Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick


© Copyright 2000 Kristen Joy Jacobus - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-07-04 07:35 PM


~Oooeee Joy15!!! haha 15.  I liiike this.  So cool and interesting.  Weeks huh? Sometimes thinking is hard enough as is,...never mind thinking with importance. Take care you. *Peace.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-07-04 07:37 PM


Going over the good and bad is enough to drive anyone insane at times!! Assess, learn, correct the mistakes and move on hon.
Reflection is good but not too much  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-07-04 09:29 PM


Picture of me, taking final exams.  Good stuff, Joy.  Hardrock
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-07-05 03:57 AM


*shudder*
really freaky one this.
Like it lots!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


moshpit
Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
5 posted 2000-07-05 07:22 AM


Inside my still and heavy head
I cannot feel me blinking

i don't know if it relates but this reminds me of times when i get really lonely.. i guess the worst thing is when you don't feel anything at all.. i would rather feel the loneliness rather than being numb.. anyway, great poem, joy 14.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-07-05 03:06 PM


this is a great piece from you the way you express through imagery is grand. was well enjoyed keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
7 posted 2000-07-05 05:50 PM


Chillingly depressing, 15. Made me think about every line( Thinking, on summer vacation!).
--Venus Macleod

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
8 posted 2000-07-05 07:06 PM


Thank you all for your replies.
Just playing around w/ the words in my head.

Joy

Neala
Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262
Florida, USA
9 posted 2000-07-05 07:23 PM


Hey Joy,
That was really kewl. Loved every secound.
-Neala
(Goddess of Sadness)

Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

10 posted 2000-07-05 07:30 PM


I LOVE this poem. I identify with this alot!
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