My Reflection In The Mirror

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Musicmaker1969

Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 589
Peterborough, Ontario Canada

0 posted 2000-07-04 03:05 PM

In the mirror, my reflection beams back
Revealing all the flaws of the times gone past.
The eyes are full of pain, recalling past events
The ears recall abuse, of messages once sent.
The nose remembers scents, the shame of times gone by
The mouth recalls the times, it did not voice a cry.
The shoulders sense the pressure, when forced against the wall
The breasts remember pain, the times that they were mauled.
The hips were forced to bear, the weight of one so close
This lips recall the kiss that lead to things much worse.
The arms feel all the pain from tight clenched fists
The tongue remembers one cold night, ot its first french kiss.
The legs recall the shameful words of a person dear
FEet recall the steps once traced, by one who followed near.
The ribs were such a weakness, tickled to submission
The stomach was a flaw; weight brought criticism.
The hair when it is brushed, sees the picture of porn
The back always slumps, feeling very forlorn.
The mind remembers all events, the heart fels all the pain
The memories stack up, one by one, buidling shame.
The mirror can reveal much more than outside looks
It reveals a person's life, contained in many books.

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JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

1 posted 2000-07-04 07:24 PM

I like this, but you may want to edit some parts. Like, when yous say, "This lips" in the 10th line. Do you mean These? And "FEet"..Other than that, I really liked the idea of how you described every part of you in the mirror.

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-07-04 07:28 PM

~I too like the way you let us "see" all in this mirror with you. I do hope that you are alright. This was well written and there are many, many times when I won't even look at myself in this type of mirror,....afraid at what I'll see. Take care. *Peace.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

3 posted 2000-07-05 12:38 PM

this is very good i enjoyed it alot. i like how you use the mirror to describe yourself its a great idea. loved it and hope to see more.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

sash
Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 125

4 posted 2000-07-05 02:02 AM

The mirror, like us , has a different reflection depending on how You view it.....Great read....Hope to see more.

~Sash~

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

5 posted 2000-07-05 08:08 AM

i've been looking at myself in the mirror for 21 years, trying to make sense of every flaw and trying even harder to accept and feel good about them.. this poem puts all our imperfections (real or perceived) into beautiful words.. i especially like this line
The mind remembers all events, the heart fels all the pain
The memories stack up, one by one, buidling shame.
nice work, Musicmaker1969

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