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LenMcC1
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 68


0 posted 2000-07-04 05:34 AM


Living A Daze


I’ve seen all the picture shows
Every single one I know
Endings never change
They are always, always the same
I’ve been to all the tourist spots
Laughed a bit, walked a lot
Folks seem to like it here
But they don’t realize that it’s nowhere

Born into a mundane life
With average parents
And an average wife
Every day is the same
Isn’t it a shame when the big event
Is that it rained
I’ve got to go leave it all behind
Start brand new and rewind

Who Am I?
I walk alone
My family smiles but I don’t know
There’re good to me but I need more
I’ve never traveled
Never warred

Maybe I’ll go to Venice beach or
Miami, even Hollywood
New York may be calling me
That truly is an artist’s peak
I always wanted to work my craft
Live a little, make some cash
But my dreams were gone when I young
My parents said no to them

But here I am at middle age
Insecure and full of rage
My wife is weak and my son is lost
All I have are my own thoughts
Everyone say’s I’m insane
They misunderstand but I’m to blame
Communication was never my way
No would listen anyway

Who Am I?
I walk alone
My family smiles but I don’t know
There good to me but I need more
I’ve never traveled
Never warred

Who am I kidding?
I cannot go
Responsibilities take a hold
My only friend is the past
My only friend then was good old’ Jack
Today is never going to change
And that’s a fact
But I am the only one who I can blame for that




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Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-07-04 10:24 AM


A great despair here, it comes out in this poem with sorrow of a life lost, of a wanting more.
you've expressed it so well here.

Joel.


I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-07-04 12:34 PM


Len....mid life crisis is upon you.  Take time to assess your attributes...the decisions you make today will chart your course for the future.  Good interpretation of the situation.....Hardrock
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-04 12:35 PM


I felt so sad like I do when our dreams are put on hold or unattainable, I wish for much more for you, and more happiness in the future, This was sad but I enjoyed reading it very much, you spoke true emotions here.
catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-07-04 05:41 PM


I think I am living that same scenario, just exchange the words wife to husband, and son to daughter. I'm sorry for your frustration, its a strong force, isn't it? Just think hard about what you need to do, and then..Do what makes you happy..if there is any possible way..
Good luck. Awesome poem in every way
catalinamoon



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-07-04 09:08 PM


This is such a sad song, and it is a song isn't it?
Makes me remember an old favourite quote I love, 'You must be the change you wish to see in your life and in the world!'
All changes begin with you, you want to change anyone can see that, so do something about it hon!!!  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-07-05 12:51 PM


well i feel for you and hope you feel better real soon. as to the poem it was great i really enjoyed it. as to what Isis said to try to change people and the world starts with you. well thats what i think all of us here are trying to do help other people out and express ourselves to be better understood and thats why this place is so grand

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-07-05 03:02 PM


~Here,...let me just say this...this is an outstanding expression of feelings.  Wow,..you have written so well,...the whole picture for me to see and understand.  Goodness,...I feel for you and your dreams. This line here is a killer..."But here I am at middle age. Insecure and full of rage". Whoa!!!  Great work. *Peace.
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