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sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2000-07-03 10:42 AM


CHOSEN PATH:

Things come, things go
Waters rise, rivers flow
From in the earth a rich resource
Once broken, now in verse

A tiny bubble bursts through
Birthing life, waters new
How is it that ne'er we see
The glorious life, abundantly?

A fish swims past my feet
A nibble: returned my friendly greet
One by one the rocks are moved
As I wade through pools I choose.

(This was essentially inspired by the literal nature described here, yet it's meaning is symbolic, and I'd like to know what people think it symbolises   Sylvia)

© Copyright 2000 Sylvia Greybe - All Rights Reserved
fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

1 posted 2000-07-03 02:30 PM


I think this poem symbolizes life.  Maybe the fish symbolizes some types of people who can be "assholes" pardon my language.

A fish swims past my feet
A nibble: returned my friendly greet

Perhaps the use of images like those of the things coming and going, and the rivers flowing, symbolize the passage of time.  Maybe it has to do with the natural order of things that is not disturbed by what happens.

Then again, I am speculating, which is something that my english literature teacher always told me NEVER to do...

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-07-03 03:39 PM


I agree with fractal to a point.  My perspective is that it symbolizes your life, with its flow, you overcoming obstacles (the rocks) and making decisions about your life (the pools you choose).  As for the fish...has to be some men in your life.  After all, we're all suckers trying to keep from getting caught (sorry, I couldn't resist).  Hardrock
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-03 07:12 PM


My take is that life is forever changing around us, sometimes we help along the movement, but it happens anyways, and if we can't change something sometimes it helps to try and change how we feel about it. I really enjoyed this one!!
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-07-03 11:03 PM


rather cunning i think to express your life in this way. i hope all things turn out for the best and do keep it all and everything up love your work keep it up. would like to see where this little story ends.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
5 posted 2000-07-04 04:51 AM


Thanks friends for your time and kind comments; I will be "finishing" this one shortly.  (the story behind it at least)
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