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Rodney Belcher
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since 2000-06-06
Posts 227
Taylor, Michigan

0 posted 2000-07-03 02:11 AM


When it ends
Do we really know?
Denial or hope
Or just plain stupidity?

Years to cultivate
Minutes to forever ruin
Trust and love
Most fragile when ignored

A callused word,
Stuck through the heart
Brings blood, kills feeling
More than any weapon known

Holding on to a memory
Hoping for a future
Sometimes better to set them free
And save hope for tomorrow



Love one another-let God do the worrying,
Rodney

© Copyright 2000 Rodney Belcher - All Rights Reserved
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-03 02:20 AM


Rodney...this is sooooo true.  And you have captured it so well here.  Loved it.  Hardrock
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-07-03 04:25 AM


Sometimes the kindest thing to do for someone, and indeed yourself, it to set them free.  Don't know whether I read it right there.   GREAT poem  
Rodney Belcher
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since 2000-06-06
Posts 227
Taylor, Michigan
3 posted 2000-07-03 01:47 PM


yep you are right on taramw...and I just came to the conclusion you reached recently...the feeling was still fresh, so why not take advantage of it?

Love one another-let God do the worrying,
Rodney

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

4 posted 2000-07-03 02:02 PM


~RB,...this part just stings me...
A callused word,
Stuck through the heart
Brings blood, kills feeling
More than any weapon known....
~Wow,...how true.  Well written. *Peace.

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-07-03 03:00 PM


Hi Rodney, this was so eloquently expressed. And so true. Isn't it amazing how one or two words can truly cut deeper than any knife, yet they can also uplift you to heights you never knew. Great poem, great words.
Catalinamoon

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
6 posted 2000-07-03 09:51 PM


God this really is so true.


Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
7 posted 2000-07-03 11:50 PM


well i just had to vote for it. loved it alot and hope to see more of you real soon. do keep up your good work.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
8 posted 2000-07-04 01:11 AM


LOVE this. Nailed desperation down with this. One minor suggestion...
A callused word,
I would change that to "callous" instead...  

sgreybe
Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
9 posted 2000-07-04 05:03 AM


Dear Rodney

Real truth here, in such an emotional piece.  I love this kind of writing.

I'd rather a knife any day.

Great work.
Sylvia

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