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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-07-02 01:18 AM


this is about my true love that died about three years ago. i been thinking of her very much lately because on the 14 of this month it would be five years for me and her and at the end of this school year coming up we would be husband and wife. it was always are plan that will never come true.


I believe in everything
    That you said
I wish so much that you
    Weren't Dead.
Memories of you still
    Fresh in my
       Head
So what should i do
     Going out
  With Tosha but, i
      Still
  Think about you



I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-02 04:36 AM


Hmm... good expression in this one Jeremiah. I am really sorry to hear about your true love... things like that are never easy.  I hope everything turns out okay for you.
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
2 posted 2000-07-02 07:13 AM


You have hinted at this story a few times, and is truely terrible for someone to die so young. I wish I knew what had happened to her. I'm sure she would have wanted you to be happy with someone else, but I guess that's easier said than done. You need more time, I suppose, to get over such a tragedy. This is a great poem, Jeremiah, and you have my sympathy, whatever that's worth. I greatly admire you for your capacity to love, a rare thing indeed in someone so young.

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-07-03 08:01 PM


Hay JJ I'm back for a while,
and yes you should think about her, but raise your small i to a capitol I, in your poem it shows you think little about yourself, in this thought of her, and she wouldn’t' want it that way. would she.

Think good things of our lost, they can see what we do, and still love us and we do them.

I have lost many,
and I know this to be true.

love, light.
Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
4 posted 2000-07-05 07:39 PM


Love hurts and I feel for you my friend. Keep up
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-07-06 07:37 AM


That pain is so hard to express and deal with..Im so sorry for your loss. Im glad you shared your story, and I hope for a new love, and a lifeime of happiness. If we go on and love again, I believe that person would be happy for us. My best to you, a nice poem of true emotions.
Jenn Cirrincione
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since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl
6 posted 2000-07-06 08:25 AM


She looks down upon you everyday... and you already know what I feel about Tosha.  
Anyway... I'm extremely sorry for the loss and I know occasionally, it gets unbearable to deal with. Take comfort in the fact that she died young,therefore, an innocent child as far as I am concerned, and is in Heaven waiting for you.
Jenn

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