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Macy
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since 2000-03-18
Posts 6
USA

0 posted 2000-07-01 07:57 PM


"Breakdown"

Each day
The pain remains -
Never ceasing to fade away
The heartache stays with her
Day after day

Like a diamond in the sky,
She used to shine

But as clouds, her emotions
cover the brightness
Where once her personality
radiated with a special glow

As her head hangs low
It painfully falls into her trembling hands

Soaked with sadness
Her eyes release silent tears

She weeps,
Hardly able to breathe

Like rain drops, her tears
are unable to stop
One by one
They so carelessly drop

Her petite body quivers
Uncontrollably
So cold and so alone

Her world crumbles
As she tries to get up
But stumbles

A broken heart shatters to pieces
As her lifeless body crashes to the floor

Her world so dark
Her life falling apart

She grimaces at the images...
Her memory plays like a movie,
Back to the first day they met

Him: As handsome as can be
She: As pretty as a doll.
Wonders if it is her turn to fall in love...

Their first date
Their first kiss
Their last day
To that last embrace -

After all the heartache
All the tears
After all the pain
She searches for what remains

A soul within
She dare finds
There all along
Time after time

With courage, she manages to open her
weary, yet beautiful blue eyes

From this moment on
Her life has changed
The future is hers

Each day
She will not only strive to live the length
of her life...
She will cherish the width

She has survived
She is, with great honor -
alive.



© Copyright 2000 Macy - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-07-01 11:36 PM


very wonderful poem. i'm gald to see that she made it. enjoyed the read thanks for posting it.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
2 posted 2000-07-02 04:28 AM


kick a**...glad she won out in the end...thats the way it should be...

if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

3 posted 2000-07-02 04:31 AM


This is a tremendous poem!    You described the emotion very well.
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-07-03 07:51 PM


A struggle in life that goes on forever,
and well put here.
Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Macy
New Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 6
USA
5 posted 2000-07-04 12:16 PM


Thanks Everyone!  
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