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AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28
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Missing Since 1999

0 posted 2000-06-29 05:01 AM


~*Do You Feel It, Too?(A Dream)*~
by: Krissie S.

Walking down a dark street.
Cold wind drifting across my lips,
Whispering forbidden dreams in my ears.
A little mystery to taste...
Black fog curling around my feet,
Spreading across my way.
Welcoming me with the breath of night.
A pale moonbeam points out my direction.
Till I reach the edge of nothing.
Where the black meets regret.
And over that edge I peer down,
And wonder how far I'd fall...
Or if I've already fallen...
Then I sink to the bottom,
Where nothing lives,
Only remembers.
A gentle hand holding up a shamed and broken face.
A quivering lip left alone to cry.
A confused heart...
Take me away from this place,
From the memories of something that never really happened.
Sorry sounds so much like sorrow...



"I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel."
~Touch and Go


© Copyright 2000 Christine Straka - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-06-29 05:11 AM


This is a beautiful poem. Sad, but beautiful. How well you express the feeling of standing at the edge of the abyss! I hope you are OK, though! Look after yourself!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
2 posted 2000-06-29 07:36 AM


I know Ive have been standing on the edge sometimes, I found meaning in your words. A wonderful verse, hope you are ok!
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-06-29 08:33 AM


Very good read, Krissi.  Enjoyed it.  Especially the lines, "where nothing lives, only remembers".  It captures the essence of darkness so well.  Hardrock
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-06-29 11:03 AM


Krissi, this one really struck me. What a feeling that is, living on memory, and nothing else. And the imagery was glorious.
Catalinamoon

AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28
Posts 388
Missing Since 1999
5 posted 2000-06-29 06:54 PM


Thanx all of you and yes I am ok I just needed to get that out ^_~

"I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel."
~Touch and Go


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

6 posted 2000-06-29 07:32 PM


~Krissie,...hi there.  Welcome here.  I'm SpitFire  .  Now, about this poem,...knowing that you are ok, let me say this.  Wow!!! What a deliciously dark piece of poetry. Oooh, liked this lots. Take care. *Peace.
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
7 posted 2000-06-30 12:18 PM


first of all i voted. wonderful piece it was a great read and i hope to see more real soon

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28
Posts 388
Missing Since 1999
8 posted 2000-06-30 01:16 AM


Thanks so much for your replies and thanks for the vote Jeramiah!

"I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel."
~Touch and Go



Acies
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Twilight Zone
9 posted 2000-06-30 11:11 AM


Anikay83

Very very imaginative. Awesome poem.  Looking forward to reading your other poems.

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
10 posted 2000-07-13 06:25 PM


Excellent poetry!! this is very good!! i adore your descriptions and symbolism....very dramatic and it gets the point across. i liked this one alot!!

swampius maximus


And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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