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LuckyinLove
Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 57
Australia

0 posted 2000-06-28 09:02 PM


When the day is over
turn on the light
have another pill it will be alright
breath the line and go alnight

Forget your problems your dreams and things
dancing on clouds, I'm dying she sings

You don't look pretty when you don't smile
fake it, laugh, make it last awhile

Who stole my mind, who took it away
coming down and wasting my day.


(I need everyone to know that I am not sad anymore, just lonely now, I am finding it hard to trust anyone.  I wrote these poems a while ago, I have never written poetry before, when I saw this site I thought someone should see them, so thankyou all for your concern, I really love it here it really has filled a void in my life, thankyou)

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Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-29 02:12 AM


glad to know your happy wish i could say the same. but as for your poem i really love it and i hope you say part of the family and keep poetry part of your life.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
2 posted 2000-06-29 02:18 AM


your poetry is beautiful...i know what you mean about filling a void, i was never able to show anyone my poetry, but if feels good to have someone read and accept your work, and even more, actually like it... keep up the good work!!


-if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.-

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-06-29 10:58 AM


I am glad you are ok now too. I'm also lonely. Life can be a challenge,especially I think for our kind of people, who are sensitive and romantic. It's so easy to be unfulfilled when your dreams are so big.
Catalinamoon

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