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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-06-28 11:47 AM




Inside you
And outside you
There is not one
There are two

When you smile
You swallow bile
A viper spits
when you kiss

But in the end
Your only friend
is that true sin
you hold within



Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


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demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
1 posted 2000-06-28 03:30 PM


Hmmmm - The concept of the "True Sin" !
You have a lot to say in these few lines. This is very good poetry! Profound in its complexity AND Profound in its Simplicity!
Well Done
Deepak


gothicmoth
Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89

2 posted 2000-06-28 03:38 PM


Perfect. Excellent title and it really flows.
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-06-29 01:42 AM


what can i say except WONDERFUL WONDERFUL. i loved this piece and i hope to read more like it so please keep it up so i hav esomething to read.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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