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bluebrdy65
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,

0 posted 2000-06-26 08:58 PM


Ok I got this thing for these colors lately
but they won,t go away.

Colors
Colors of crimson run through my head
Lavender feelings are spread
Amber skies dashed with red
Pitch black dark
with twinkiling white lights
Just before I go to my bed.


heres a little something extra

It is cold
and I am quiet
and my mind I can not control

The tick of the clock
I can not stop............

ok that didnt make alot of sense just a feeling in my head

© Copyright 2000 Janie M. Williams - All Rights Reserved
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
1 posted 2000-06-26 11:53 PM


now if you sit down and actually read this, it truly captures a moment.  i can see you there, frantically writing, and then scratching it out, does it work, is it saying what i yearn to be heard??? i love this, those, one, two , however you like!!  i read it as one, a moment in your life.  thank you for the view.  once againnnnn we relate!!  loves ya!!

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
2 posted 2000-06-27 01:29 AM


with out such a colorful world  where would we be? keep life colorful!!!
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-06-27 02:43 AM


yes i agree black and white is so duel. though i prefer the black sometimes i like reds and greens thanks for posting this it gives great ideas. keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
4 posted 2000-06-27 08:50 AM


If I could express my world in colors..very  interesting and I enjoyed it very much. Keep creating its fun and it has meaning!!!!


kitkat
Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
5 posted 2000-06-27 10:32 AM


I liked the way you expressed your feelings. Even the ticking of the clock..I believe we have no control over time...So that last stance fit..
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
6 posted 2000-06-27 03:08 PM


Bluebrdy....thanks for inviting me into your bedroom....no wait, uhh, that didn't sound nice did it?  Well, you know what I mean....nice work.  I especially liked the part about the stuff in your head...that's where all mine comes from (See For all you Trekkies) Hardrock
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