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tac
Junior Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 28
New Jersey

0 posted 2000-06-26 02:38 AM


Beaten Down
by Me

Where I am no one may go
lest they be swallowed by the darkness
I search for love, honesty and understanding
all I find is pain, lies, bitterness and rage
I feel the emptyness inside
how can I remove this pain I feel

I live in an emotional black hole
sucking me in, deeper and deeper
destroying all there is around me
I long to cry, but can no longer feel
no one can reach me

The pain within is overwhelming
how much longer must I endure

I scream
can anybody hear my cry

So many people in my travels
I live my life alone

giving up...

can't
go
on
like
this
much
longer...

I'm putting up the walls...never coming out
I'm beaten down

© Copyright 2000 tac - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-26 03:11 AM


i feel this so much i've been destroyed by the same people i thought were my friends and now i'm in my own little world all alone and it bites. loved your poem and hope to see more from you real soon.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


kitkat
Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
2 posted 2000-06-26 03:56 AM


Gee Tac, This is so sad. Try not to build that wall to high. There is someone out there
and someday that person my pass on by cause they cannot see you inside that wall.

--------------
You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King



taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

3 posted 2000-06-26 06:31 AM


This is a very deep poem indeed... hmm.. sometimes you know all these people but nobody seems to really hear what you are saying... you are always left alone.  I liked this poem very much  
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-06-26 08:23 AM


Hey Tac, down but not out, ok? I feel so much pain here, but you are not alone. Never alone, because we are here, and someday someone will be there for you in person. Its just timing. Now is a bad time, tomorrow could be the best..but you have to be available to let the good come in. I'm rambling here, but I hate to hear that hopeless voice. I have been there, and intermittently late at night I am still there. But I KNOW somewhere, somehow, it will change again, it always does. Take care.
Catalinamoon

LuckyinLove
Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 57
Australia
5 posted 2000-06-26 08:33 AM


I believe that even with our walls up there is always going to be someone out there who can break them down, let just hope its worth it cause Im tired of building.  Sometimes I think I was born with walls.
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
6 posted 2000-06-26 12:28 PM


It must be the biggest hole in calcutta, I've been there.
climbed out.
you can to.

love you kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
7 posted 2000-06-26 01:12 PM


NO!! Dont put up that wall!!  Trust me on this. Once that wall is there it is a struggle to break down.  Sometimes the wall can be protective yet it scares the people that love you away!  Deal with life a step at a time, baby steps so to speak.  You can do it!!

Peace

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
8 posted 2000-06-27 04:49 AM


tac,

this poem is so terribly sad. I hope you are ok! don't forget that you can always email me!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Jamie
Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
9 posted 2000-06-27 04:58 AM


I live in an emotional black hole
sucking me in, deeper and deeper
destroying all there is around me
I long to cry, but can no longer feel
no one can reach me......

Others have gone before, and more shall surely follow..here is an excerpt from one of mine....

Once again the sun has risen, yet I am comforted not by it's offer of abundant warmth. Frozen within this cloak of suffocating darkness I find myself once more.The ever so brief glimmer of hope, which was so cruelly and tantalizingly held before me drowned, like all those before.

The cold  winds of winter despair, descend upon  the spring of my renewal, stripping away my happiness, leaving me  raw and bleeding, broken, naked, humiliated and hopelessly destroyed.

From within the tortured remains of my heart are squeezed the last drops of hope, their taste immediately familiar, as in the form of tears they pause upon my lips, before continuing their journey slowly down my face.

....as you can see, We say it in different ways, but share much the same pains...hang in there.
The poem conveys the heaviness of your heart well.


Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



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