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sgreybe
Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2000-06-25 02:25 PM

THE TENANT:

Again the familiar; the safe
Or is it?

You: and your words remain
The tenant

Always present; can't complain
I started

My pain, sensitivity
Just an extension of me

You yourself, unaware
Of what's left there

I'm left, thwarted
Attempts, love, aborted.

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

1 posted 2000-06-25 03:54 PM

So true.....so descriptive of some relationships....and done so well with so few words. I love your stuff....Hardrock.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2000-06-25 05:27 PM

Sylvia, I like all your poems too. The last two words, "love aborted", really got to me..

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-25 07:31 PM

~Short and packed this one. Wow,..has a heaviness to it. Great work. Take care. *Peace.

kynder
Senior Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

4 posted 2000-06-25 08:30 PM

man i love poems like this. so powerful and with so few words. i love it!! attempts, love, aborted. i almost fell out of my chair!!!!!! let me read this again!! wow....

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

LuckyinLove
Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 57
Australia

5 posted 2000-06-25 11:40 PM

That one really left me thinking, I don't really know how I feel, sorry I will have to read it ten times. I think it reminds me of how boring life can get out with the old in with the new.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

6 posted 2000-06-26 02:16 AM

thanks for the read and great work posted here. keep it up so i can keep reading.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

7 posted 2000-06-26 09:42 AM

Well to me the title got to me, some tenants can be a night mare, some not.
very powerful kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

sgreybe
Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

8 posted 2000-06-26 02:18 PM

Wow... thanks guys for all your kind comments! Is the first time I've written something like this, so I guess I can keep on going!

I really appreciate it all, thanks and peace to you all.

Sylvia

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

9 posted 2000-07-01 04:55 PM

Powerful words here, I loved it!! Keep writing

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