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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
see if you can find the meaning i can't. just joking Small View Open Slightly the darkness there frighting Clay Colored Slightly Red soul's escapeing all the time Through the mind TO The Freedom Outside hideing in the clouds From The Things Not Humanly ALOUD. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
reminds me of what the holocaust would have been like. or the life of an innocent prisoner. it could be someone with a mental illness begging to be free from their sickness. or a cancer patient? or am I digging too deep...anyway, I like. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
A good one Jeremiah... I tend to think of someone who wants to be what they believe society will not want them to be... they glimpse pieces and want the whole picture.. I don't know, perhaps I am barking up the wrong tree! Keep it up  |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
ok my stab this Sunday morning. My first impression, A light in the dark,("Small View Open Slightly") Looking at our imprisoned hell,("the darkness there freighting") that we put ourselves within, seeing a way out of this dilemma,("Clay Colored Slightly Red") (our hell) we try to reach out side ?? with our poems here in passions, ("soul's escaping all the time")(the plural "soul's our poems) ("TO The Freedom Outside hiding in the clouds") Freedom of our minds in here, and the clouds represent a soft landing, with all our friends here and all there kind responses, From The Things Not Humanly ALOUD. This is where it gets tacky, ?? we are not ?? like the world here (in passions), the world is so?? judgmental and hard this isn't a place for the world here, we all try to become more than human here, in the outside world it's not possible to except people as they are, but in here it is. Whew!! Ok I'm done rambling. haha Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Darn Joel.....we think too much alike. Good thing you're on one coast and I'm on the other.....One state's not tough enough for the two of us. Good read Jeremiah. Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Jeremiah, this feels to me like someone frustrated with society and in the way it tries to control. Love it Catalinamoon |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i have no idea. which is why i like it. i actually see sex... uh should i have said that????? hee hee kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
thank you all for your replies to this poem and many others a million thanks. and joel you have been really stabing. Just joking i don't mined it kind of helps but i prefer to post here for all my friends. and you just about found the meaning but i thought in different words i've been feeling so traped and have no one to unlock my cell so i'm escapeing. hhehehehe mad man on the loose look out. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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