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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well is one here is a different type of writing for me so just tell the truth on what you think about it. Feel the warmth before you die To Show the young children With Fruitful eye's There's more to living Then Just to die. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Hey JJ, there is a critical analysis forums, I know, I know this is home, but?? Most of us here aren’t looking for the world to be critical and judge us in here, the moment we step in dark passions we relies that the people here need to be excepted as they are So I hope with all that I am you will excuse me from criticizing your work in a clinical manor. And if in some small way I have done what your poem express, by telling you all this and ?? teaching the young (you) that there is more to life than just dyeing then I'm glad. All in all, I have found your short poem written far beyond your youthful years, it shows me that some where in this world there is a 17 year old with wisdom beyond explications. So I hope your fruitful eyes aren’t offended by this old man's ramblings. Thank you for an enjoyable Sunday morning. Feeling the warmth, Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
ok, how do you take a new style for you and make it seem like you been there forever?? you are a natural poet, boo. the first step is admitting it!!! you are in denial!! ahhahahahahaha try any style, i dare ya!! it will come out GOOD. practice will make perfect for you. loves ya kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Jeremiah, I like theway these few words tell you something important. As for syle comments, I am clueless, as I have 2 or 3 different styles I write in, none of which are traditionally correct. I would not know perfect if it slapped me in the face. But I definitely liked this. PS Would love to hear more about your book. Where do I get your email addy. Catalinamoon |
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