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SlyOne
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 16


0 posted 2000-06-24 04:23 PM


The days we spent together were incredible to say the least by far.      The laughs, the smiles, the good times, especially the night at the bar.
When we danced, I was in heaven, when you kissed me, Oh I thought I had caught a fallen star.
I remember our first kiss like it was yesterday, soft lips, sensuous touch.
That was a feeling I didn't want to rush.
I saw the look in your eyes as you undressed me,
You wanted me as much as I needed you, this I could see.
The way it felt when you touched me that night, massaging and caressing my breast.
All I could think was Oh GOD, can I handle the rest.
You kissed me, put my mind at ease.
I wanted to scream Oh God Diane, please please please.....
It didn't take long for us both to realize what we wanted to happen that night.
Oh God Hunny, you standing there, in front of me, what a beautiful sight.
We kissed, our bodies touched, our eyes meet and you could see.
I wanted you to make sweet love to me.
And so the night passed as we made love to one another for what seemed like hours maybe even days.
I laid there, my head and in a total daze.
It was unlike any feeling I had experienced before.
You had somehow opened that locked door.
The door to my heart had been slammed and locked for a very long time night.
All I could think was Oh this all feels so right.
I cant tell you in mere words how you have made me feel deep within my soul.
Its almost like I have climbed out of a deep dark hole.
I know it will take some time for this relationship to grow.
I am willing to be patient, give you space and take it slow.
I want you to know how I feel in my heart as well as my head.
I don't want you to think I just want you in my bed.
You are so good for me as well as I am for you.
I know we can have many days filled with sunshine and skies of blue.





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SlyOne
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 16

1 posted 2000-06-24 04:39 PM


Ok, so Im new and am not real sure how this works, but I would like some feed back on this poem.... Thanks all


taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-06-24 10:42 PM


Woooaahhhhh!!! Racy!   What a beautiful ending!  Nice poem  
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-06-24 11:26 PM


Hi, its nice to hear someone is in the happy part of a relationship, at least if that was you in the poem..I could feel the excitement of a new love, and the hopes and dreams for the future. Very nice
Sandra

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-06-25 12:23 PM


Slyone, and you are, when I saw this poem I first thought, OMG, A novel??? then when I started I couln't stop what a wonderful poem kid, and I'm glad this thing worked out for you, just what a wonderful poem.

and when I'm clicking out I glanced over to see this was your first post what a wonderful first post and a
HHHHHHHHOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWLLLLLLLLLLing
WWWeeeellllcoccooooommmmeeeee
really Welcome to Dark Passions,
Keep it up kid. hahaha
Joel.< !signature-->

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.


[This message has been edited by Joel the wolf (edited 06-25-2000).]

SlyOne
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 16

5 posted 2000-06-25 01:18 AM


Thanks for all the feed back guys.....Glad you liked it.. I will be posting some more soon, let me know what you think....


LuckyinLove
Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 57
Australia
6 posted 2000-06-25 04:46 AM


Hi Im new here too, I thought your peom is everything I am looking for but just as scarded to have it as well,  Its been a while for me to have those feelings but I can't wait for the excitment.
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
7 posted 2000-07-01 05:10 PM


How well I remember the beginning of the romance and the endless feelings. What a wonderful experience and excellent poem!!
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 2000-07-01 06:56 PM


Welcome to Passions!!   Great first post, reminding us all of new love!  But if you decide to write anything racier than this I think it would be better in the adult forum!! LOL    Great work and welcome again  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
9 posted 2000-07-02 11:36 AM


WOW!! Now this was one heck of a read first thing in the morning!!     Great work and WELCOME to Dark Passions!!


Peace


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
10 posted 2000-07-07 06:31 PM


wow i looked at the length & almost skipped over this 1 but as i skimed over it i had to go back & read it again it was great  
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