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jennie may*
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 122


0 posted 2000-06-24 02:45 AM


just tell me that we
haven't given up the
large hiccup swimming in the
storm that will erupt
in my head

the fear in my voice
too dead

my poor swollen face
your fists will never replace
tiny tears that
trickle down my face

for the world to see

© Copyright 2000 jennie may* - All Rights Reserved
bluebrdy65
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
1 posted 2000-06-24 08:11 AM


oh !!
this is sad
good job
blue

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-06-24 09:11 AM


I have spent my life teaching other people self-Defense, and a poem like this gets me going, start ducking kid, and get an equlizer, fight like a tiger holding on to your skin.
Because it's your soul you lose to the world's sin.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-06-25 02:01 AM


keep your head above the water and don't sink like me. for things will get better for you. best of luck and great work.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
4 posted 2000-06-25 07:05 PM


wow... this really hit me.  i bear marks of fists for the world to see, it is my tears i hide.  maybe i should switch!!  more empathy maybe??? loving this one!!  i will read more of your works.  

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

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