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The Thorns ( a poem for you) |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
today was too dark for these pale hands the same palms that touched the stars when they touched your skin I told you with aged tears that I can't hurt anymore today you stole away my innocence and tomorrow will be filled with my thoughts covered with thorns and sore eyes that know too much |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great poem though i don't find the subject of it i love it so for teh meaning it most hold for you. i wish to read more of you i'll keep an eye out for your name. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
jennie may... this is a beautiful poem... very well written. it's more like the gift of life... i would say... as painful of heartbreaks are you always learn to live to go on...and that's life If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
Jennie, take it back, learn from experience and go on, there is always happiness out there somewhere. Bless your heart for all your pain great job here keep it up Blue |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Pain..beautifully expressed, hope to see more of your writing. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jennie May, you have a quality and gift for poetry...while this is sad, I'll be looking for more works on a lighter note. Well done! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Jennie, yes you have expressed your self so much in this poem, it' shows a great pain , and or the knowledge of pain to great depth. take care, Love, light. Joel. |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
i like the way you put your words together...this is really good.  |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Very impressive Jennie....well constructed. Enjoyed it....more, more. Hardrock |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
ok jenniemay, i just read one of your poems and i felt a twinge. now tears are streaming, i feel you are my twin. mere words like excellent, wonderful, amazing... can't describe your poem here. thank you for sharing this. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Jennie May,...this poem makes me feel. It reads so softly in the beginning and then ends with such a harshness.....like lots of pain. Great writing. Take care. *Peace. |
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