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Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas

0 posted 2000-06-24 12:55 PM


The Gift of Death I beg of you
For my ever lasting love so true
Touch me, caress me, take my soul
Blacken my heart with ur powerful coals
Glance gently into my eyes
Seeing all the painful tears I cried
Take my breathe and make no more
My inner self has been hardened to the core
The Gift of Death I beg of you
For this I shall never again be blue

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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-06-24 12:57 PM


Now that's one gift I don't want!! Good poem, and sometimes we all feel this way.  
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-06-24 01:43 AM


yes i agree death seems to be the only way out. i do understand this alot and great work.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-06-24 05:07 AM


hey there...
i am going to say something that maybe won't go with how you feel but it'd worth a try...
I'm not going to deny the validity of this someone in your life but would you just take a look at yourself once and see life as in every breath and you don't want to cease that
it's too precious...and what good would it serve...stick in there and show your love that's the way out...not death!
this poem is close to me cause like poet de vin said we all feel like this sometime...
see you around...fighting

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


bluebrdy65
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
4 posted 2000-06-24 08:34 AM


The gift of death I have wished for
only to find when I pass through the next door.I am glad I did not get my wish that I had so eagerly emplored.
great work here.
Blue

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
5 posted 2000-06-24 09:21 AM


yes I understand you all to well on this.
my head, my thoughts, my dreams, at one time.
not now.
love you kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
6 posted 2000-06-24 11:45 AM


Well thank you all very much for your replies.  But actually I am doing fine.  I wrote this one in reply to FJiznit's poem post.  If I go this deep with a post, than 9/10 times its fictional.  But thanx everyone for your concern.

Peace

FJiznit
Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 24

7 posted 2000-06-25 10:31 AM


I'm wanting to speak to you about this via messenger, I shall wait...
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

8 posted 2000-06-25 10:52 AM


~Oh how at times this poem rang true for me. Well depicted.  I am glad to read the replies and learn that this is fictional for you. Thank goodness. hehe. Loved it...dark and chilling...YES!!!  Take Care. *Peace.
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
9 posted 2000-06-25 07:26 PM


ah yes so simple the solution of death.  it is the war of life that brings the reward of death.  very good work here.  your imagery is  excellent.

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

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