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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-06-23 06:10 PM


I have a little secret
It's only mine you know
If I tell you my secret
You must be as special as a rose

I have a secret
I hold it close
Not letting very many people see
That if I let the world in on my secret
I'll be loosing a part of me

Here is my secret
I'll hold it as a note in the palm of my hand
Read it as I look away
I hope you'll understand!


I don't have one secret in particular I want to hide, but I have many.  Secrets are good things! Well, most are!  I like the idea of your own little secret that nobody else knows about.  I'm guessing everyone has 'em!

Joy


[This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 06-23-2000).]

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SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-06-23 07:14 PM


~Oh,...SpitFire here has got a few secrets. haha.  I love this.  I especially like the part where the speaker says...
Here is my secret
I'll hold it as a note in the palm of my hand
Read it as I look away
I hope you'll understand!....

~I love that...I can see it taking place.
Looking away,....with an open hand.  Cool post. *Peace.


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-06-23 07:21 PM


Depends on the secret, some secrets can never  be told!!    Good work...  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-06-23 08:34 PM


Joy....I really liked the interplay between the one with the secret and the one being allowed to share......and the implied bond being formed.  I got so much out of this.....simply beautiful.  Hardrock
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-06-23 11:49 PM


Joy you have been gone?? it's great to have you back.
yes I have a few, some I could tell you some if I did I'd have to kill you. hahaha
love your work kid.
and stay a while.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
5 posted 2000-06-24 01:16 AM


i find this funny cause i have things from my past that no one knows about and can never know. Here is my secret. LOL great poem love the idea cause its different.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
6 posted 2000-06-25 12:51 PM


I'm glad you enjoyed this, but I'm a little surprised this got any replies because after I wrote it I found it a little less than perfect, a little more than completley horrid.

With a wink and a smile,  
Joy
< !signature-->

Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick



[This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 06-25-2000).]

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