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Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-06-23 03:59 PM


I use to do pot so this is a important issue for me so if you don't mined please give me you input.

I'm a death you cannot be
          I
      Do not think or see
             But
           I'm still this disease
               That breaths inside your
                       Mind
                   I'll take effect in a short time
                                        I
                    Control your sanity and rage
                                  I
                Control if you make it to the
                         Next page.
                          I
        Cannot be stopped while still
                Consuming.
                 I
     Promise to keep in use your
    Mind booming.
  Until
One day it's all gone just
     Another
       Smoke stream in the front
               L
                A
                 W
                  N.

we'll i hope you liked it i tried something new here also in my own style i tried to make it like a stream so tell me what you think.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-06-23 04:12 PM


Hey JJ....that was really neat.  Liked the formatting.  What's REALLY neat is that you don't do pot anymore....I've seen too many people trash their lives just for a little "chill".  Keep your head clear....so we can see more of your good work.  Hardrock
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
2 posted 2000-06-23 04:44 PM


hey you, good work here.  i really like how you go out on a limb to try to convey your message in a different way.  broaden those horizons, boo!!!      but you know me, jaybean, smoke til ya choke!!!!!! bahaha!!!

loves ya
kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-06-23 11:45 PM


I use to just smoke, 4 packs a day and three cigars, John Wane was my hero, he did 5.
but back to this I quit cold turkey, and no smoke of any kind will ever pass these lips, but brain smoke.

I teach kids, in my class to protect them selves from all things and mind altering smoke is a big one. but that's me.
not to ruffle feathers but that's me.
hahaha. live with it. hahaha

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2000-06-23 11:57 PM


I loved the format to this!!  I am thankful I have never smoked anything of any kind...but I know many people who have or do!!  It makes me kinda sad!!  I have always thought it peculiar that I just don't have the desire to even try!!  It's like I know about it but I really don't!! Good poem JJ!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-06-24 12:02 PM


Hey, I think that was real brave of you to write that and state your history with it. Many many moons ago I was a big ol pothead, and never liked it that much, it always made me feel too seperate from myself. But back then in the old days, well it was what we all did. Anyway, the format of the poem was coo, and the description felt pretty right on to me too.
Catalinamoon

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-06-24 01:04 AM


thank you all for your replies. they all mean a great deal to me because it was something i went through. and joel Check your Email i have a idea for you. and again thank you all.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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