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Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

0 posted 2000-06-23 03:37 PM


THE TRAIN

Some folks ride the train of life, looking out the rear,
Watching miles of life roll by, and marking every year.
They sit in sad remembrance, of wasted days gone by,
And curse their life for what it was, and hang their head and cry.

But I don’t concern myself with that, I took a different bent,
I look forward to what life holds, and not what has been spent.
So strap me to the engine, buck naked as can be,
I want to be out on the front, to see what I can see.

I WANT to feel the winds of change, blowing in my face,
I want to see what life unfolds, as I move from place to place.
I want to see what’s coming up, not looking at the past,
Life’s too short for yesterdays, it moves along too fast.

So if the ride gets bumpy, while you are looking back,
Go up front, and you may find, your life has jumped the track.
It’s alright to remember, that’s part of history,
But up front’s where it’s happening, there’s so much mystery.

The enjoyment of living, is not where we have been,
It’s looking ever forward, to another year and ten.
It’s searching all the byways, never should you refrain,
For if you want to live your life, you gotta drive the train.

Marv Hardin


© Copyright 2000 Marv Hardin - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-23 04:04 PM


oh this says it all about life and what we must do i love this so i think you should summit it cause you'll have my vote. great work here as always keep it up. and keep looking forward and stop looking back.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-06-23 04:08 PM


Enjoyed the message...it is very positived and full of energy...James
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-06-23 11:30 PM


I hate to just ride, god.
And yes I'm a driver. great poem my friend.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

bluebrdy65
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
4 posted 2000-06-24 08:14 AM


I loved this poem
you are so right
Yes I like the front seat.
Great Great work !!!!!!
blue

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
5 posted 2000-06-24 09:22 AM


While I've got to admire your style, I've got this visual image of a person buck-naked now!

Really good stuff...you have a style similar to another revered poet in the forums, I won't say who, but I CAN say that now I will have to search his and YOUR stuff out for my "great stuff" fixes every day!

Thanks!

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
6 posted 2000-06-24 10:18 AM


Thanks blubrdy and Sunshine......yeah Sunshine, that is an awful image, me buck naked on the front of a train....ewwwww.  It's bad enough when I get out of the shower and stand in front of a full length mirror.....no admiration there.  I'll have to post a picture when I get one....so you can judge for yourself.  Keep the Tum's handy!!!  Hardrock
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2000-06-25 07:09 AM


Oh how true this is!    Sometimes you just gotta get out there and make things happen if you want that change.  Loved this!  
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-06-25 11:51 AM


Hi again, I really like this. I have to tell you, not that I am an expert on this, but generally rhyming poems sound slightly stilted to me, even when I like them a lot. Yours never do. It just flows absolutely perfectly. I love reading your work. And this was such a good message, sometimes its so damn hard to climb out of the caboose though, and go to the front. Maybe the future is scarier than the past to me.. Good advice in this poem though, and I am going to try to follow it.
Sandra

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

9 posted 2000-06-25 07:55 PM


~ *Whistle*...*Whistle*,...wow Hardrock....nice writing.  Inspirational.  As I read I noticed myself straightening up in my chair....head high...chest out...yes...very nice work. Take care. *Peace.
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