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This Side of the Door |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I stand here crying on this side of the door Your footsteps echoes fading on that side of the door Three inches of pine is all that separates me from you A wooden door and miles of pain from a heart torn in two Once more I am all alone on this side of the door As I lock it one last time to unlock it nevermore. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can hear the footsteps fading...well done, PdV... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
That gave me a chill, so strong was the image of the door never to be unlocked again. I have been there many times, it is a sad place.. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
That's exactly how it happened, PdV.....you must have been there watching. Well done.....Hardrock |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
ouch...that husrt me it's horrible when you are right next to each other and still so far away...3 inches of pine maybe but...miles of pain... very well written... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love how you use the door as a symbol of the heart its works so great for the locking of it . great work. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
God we are on the same wave link. God. I have a poem I've been working on for the last two weeks involving a door, I'll post it soon. I believe a door to us is so important, going in and out, locking, allowing them to enter, and keeping them out. great poem. I could go on and on. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Ooh Poet de Vine - so final... gave me goosebumps. Yes, spine-chilling stuff. *sigh* Hmm... very thought-provoking. I liked this poem very much |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~PDV,...this poem just makes my heart hurt. It's so well written and pushes the speaker's feelings right into you. Thank you for sharing this. Take care. *Peace. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i really like this, poet. i think i threw away my key even!!! excellent imagery here. your poem is much like your name, divine!!! kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I sensed a very strong message with this, and know that feeling all too well. Absolutely wonderful verse |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a powerful poem, wow, excellent poem,I am really at a loss for words.. thanks for sharing.. take care A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
What a sad, despairing poem. I've been there, too. But I unlocked the door again afterwards quite a few times!  Was worth it, too ...Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
'Tis the moment that matters - and all is fair in love and war - doors can be opened again! You expressed that "moment" wonderfully! Deepak Menon |
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