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Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods

0 posted 2000-06-22 07:17 PM



From sanity I fell
Into arms of lunacy
In stifling darkness I trembled
From the hand of God
Into the grip of Lucifer
I sufocate as he quells my prayer
In despair I wisper in a choked voice;
-Oh how far the lovely has gone
Sinking, fearing
Alas! How deep I've sunk
Into this greyish dark lake,
fathomless and cold
Below a layer of frost,
a little sound reminds me
How high the beautiful has flown
And now it seems,
I'm just a stranger to myself
And reluctantly I go,
just a bit further down the road
Peering through the thickening fog
Losing my soul in the everlasting mist
I've got nothing more to sell
Nothing more to scream nor tell
Guess I'm all yours now
All yours

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De profundis clamo ad te Domine!




[This message has been edited by Broken (edited 06-22-2000).]

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Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-06-22 07:32 PM


Well Done, Broken.  I like the "giving over" of oneself to the Lucifer of despair.....how it all came together.  Good piece of writing.  Hardrock
EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
2 posted 2000-06-22 10:53 PM


Wow! this is very vivid. "I've got nothing more to sell", I often feel like that


God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-06-22 11:15 PM


Great writing!  Description of feeling etc.
I too have felt that this is all I am and have and it's yours.. do you even want it?
Know what you mean hon..  

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-06-23 01:04 AM


this is a poem i think that everyone can feel we all go down the path sometime. and some never find their way out of the fog. great piece here thanks

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
5 posted 2000-06-23 04:57 AM


This is relly good Broken, I really like this one.
To sale everything and to give up with nothing left, god I've felt this before and not to long back.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
6 posted 2000-06-26 12:35 PM


Broken...my dear friend...please don't let yourself fall astray so far that you cannot come back. I understand your struggle...but I would miss you very much so please don't let yourself go this way. This was a beautiful poem....very vivid and honest...I'm never disappointed. Sorry it took me so long but I'm rarely ever here anymore. All my love and best wishes are sent to you...my dark angel. Take care

D.E.


Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't.

~*Angel of Darkness*~

"So what are we, helpless? Puppets? No, the big moments are gonna come...you can't help that. It's what you do afterwards that counts. That's when you find out who you really are. You'll see what I mean..." -Whistler

*+Daughter of Darkness+*


Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
7 posted 2000-11-08 12:58 PM



Gotta love you guys!
Flattered by all your replies.

Take care you all
~Broken~

Oh God! Why the angels fall first?

Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
8 posted 2000-11-08 04:57 PM


Wonderful poem. It hit the spot! I loved this so much. The ending put me in awe..

"I've got nothing more to sell
Nothing more to scream nor tell
Guess I'm all yours now
All yours"

WONDERFUL!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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