navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » Life
Dark Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic Life Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738


0 posted 2000-06-22 06:39 AM


Hey girl, what ya doing there
With ya eyes so blue
Lookin' out at this world
How's it been treatin' you?

The tears they fallin' freely
On lifes cruel pathway
What's that ya say girl -
Tough? Hey, ain't it alway?

Welcome to the scene of life
Girl, what ya see is what ya get
Hey, but don't sit around and
Take no **** - life isn't set.

Come on now, smile girl
Didn't you know life's what ya make
It. Lift those shoulders, stand proud
Hey, girl, life's what you can take.


~ Tara ~

© Copyright 2000 Tara - All Rights Reserved
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-06-22 07:59 AM


Tara....great poem.  I like the short, direct type...and I like the use of the dialect...it invoked visions of tough street people, hardened by years of pain and poverty, steeled to the visicitudes of life, still finding something positive.  Loved it.  Hardrock
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-06-22 10:54 AM


Great Tara, yes hard it is , and we seem to take all that we can stand somethimes.
I love the hard lines telling her?self to harden up and stand up. yes.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-22 12:24 PM


~Tara,..this is a great one.  I like the roughness it has to it...and yes, life is what you make it...so let's get busy 'eh?  haha. Thanks for sharing this. Take care. *Peace.
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-06-23 12:04 PM


great poem yes we all and you can all get thru life. good job here keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » Life

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary