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Lonely Old Man

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Hardrock
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since 02-14-2000
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0 posted 06-21-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Hardrock

Lonely Old Man

"You’ll die an old and lonely man",
My lady friend said to me.
"But that’s impossible", I replied,
"For I’m already dead, you see".

"What you see, standing here,
Is just an empty shell.
So there’s no place for me to go,
For years I’ve been in hell."

There’s been no love, no tender arms,
To hold me through the night.
And when I died, no one came,
To lead me to the light.

I wander here, on this cold earth,
With no where else to go,
I’m just passing through the years,
But why, I’ll never know.

I’m stuck in Viet Nam, you see,
I can’t wash away the mud.
I can’t sneeze away the cordite,
I can’t spit away the blood.

I can’t shut my ears to gunfire,
I can’t block out all the screams,
I can’t walk around the landmines,
I can’t block out all the dreams.

I can’t not see their faces,
As another buddy dies,
I can’t not feel the mother’s pain,
As she sits and rocks and cries.

So maybe I’m not so empty,
As I may think I am.
For I’m still filled with emotions,
Left over from Viet Nam.

So though I’m dead, my body lives,
‘Guess it was meant to be.
But when that goes, take me back,
And tie me to a tree.

Place a claymore in my lap,
Then string a tripwire tight.
Then go ahead and trip it,
‘Cause there’s no one left to fight.

Then tell my friends, I died in ‘Nam,
While still young and strong and tan,
So they won’t know I died alone,
An old and lonely man.

Marv Hardin
February 1, 2000

© Copyright 2000 Marv Hardin - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 06-08-2000
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1 posted 06-21-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for Jeremiah Johnson   Email Jeremiah Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremiah Johnson

i've read two of your works so far and i love them i also think that you should summit this one for the book. and keep writing and i'll keep reading.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

kynder
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2 posted 06-21-2000 06:06 PM       View Profile for kynder   Email kynder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kynder

you strike chords in me i would rather leave unstruck.  soooooo very rarely, sad it may seem, am i moved to tears.  you got me twice in one day.  thank you.  i guess i needed to cry today.  my respect grows with every one i choose to read... so now i will read them all, and prolly sob!!!!!!   hee hee

kynder

A woman to a man is
But a mere chapter,
But a man to a woman
Is an entire book.--
Kynder Howell
Hardrock
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3 posted 06-21-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

Thanks guys....your kind word of support inspire me....I guess that's what it's all about: Poets inspiring other poets.  Sorry If I made you cry Kynder.  You are tenderhearted....so I won't do it three times in a day.  But like The Terminator:  I'll be back.   Hardrock
Joel the wolf
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4 posted 06-21-2000 11:15 PM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

hardrock is this your experence,?? we will talk.
anyway this is a great and masterful poem. yo have brought out years of my past I had hoped to lay to rest.
but like a good garden it's good to turn the soil a few times, to let it ?? grow.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone


5 posted 06-21-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Oh My God, that was so heart wrenching. Amazing poem.  I wrote a small one about vietnam, I think I will hide it away now, you have blown me away with this, I am not worthy.
Hardrock
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6 posted 06-22-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

To Joel....there is some of me in all my poems...the trick is to figure out which part.  Like you, my friend, this one came from deep within.....

To Catalina....don't hide your poem about Viet Nam away....I have tried to get someone to publish a book of poems about Viet Nam....there was some great poetry that came out of that time, and there is still some good stuff to be written by later generations on their perceptions of it.  Post it....I would like to read it.

To you both....thanks for responding....it lets me know someone cares.   Hardrock
Swĺmp¤Faer˙ie
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7 posted 06-23-2000 05:05 PM       View Profile for Swĺmp¤Faer˙ie   Email Swĺmp¤Faer˙ie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Swĺmp¤Faer˙ie

oooh i liked the first few paragraphs the most!! i've heard this kinda thing from alotta people,including myself.....very interesting put into verse.

swamp

And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson
JamesMichael
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8 posted 06-23-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very interesting reading and I hope your ladyfriend is wrong.  No one deserves to be lonely...James
Deborah1
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9 posted 07-27-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

My heart is now in pieces, broken from the sadness, There are no words for me to express how I feel, this is way beyond the best!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
tookabear
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10 posted 07-27-2000 10:36 PM       View Profile for tookabear   Email tookabear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tookabear's Home Page   View IP for tookabear

The scars of war are not always visible.  The wounds of the soul last a lifetime.  Heartwrenching poem, Hardrock.  You're amazing.
L Tiuch
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11 posted 07-27-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for L Tiuch   Email L Tiuch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for L Tiuch

How tragically beautiful...so sad, and so heartwrenching.  My children's father did 2 tours in Viet Nam and so much of what you wrote, haunted him as well.  Please know there are people out there and that there's no need to die a lonely, old man.  Linda
Lady Lost
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12 posted 07-28-2000 08:22 AM       View Profile for Lady Lost   Email Lady Lost   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Lost

You really should make this a book selection...this is one of the best poems I have ever read..I mean that.  This poem is exquisite, and wonderfully written.

You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore
Lynne Dale
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13 posted 07-28-2000 09:37 AM       View Profile for Lynne Dale   Email Lynne Dale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynne Dale

It should be in the book selection. Soooo Sad. it made me cry.
Kethry

Kethry.
as soon as you feel too old to do a thing. Do it!
lotharingia
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14 posted 07-28-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

How come did I miss this one as well?
I think I must have lost count of the amount of times you've managed to make me cry.

*sniff*
  *sniff*
    *sniff*


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo


meara
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15 posted 07-28-2000 06:58 PM       View Profile for meara   Email meara   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for meara

I love this poem.  You are such an amazing writer.  I just hope that you will never stop writing.
Martie
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16 posted 07-28-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

written with such a sensitive and tender touch, even though the subject is so bitter.  You have put together a remarkable poem!
juliet_2u
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17 posted 07-28-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juliet_2u

Hardrock, this was so very moving. So sad but true for so many I'm sure. Take care, Juls
a-alibaster
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18 posted 07-29-2000 09:39 AM       View Profile for a-alibaster   Email a-alibaster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit a-alibaster's Home Page   View IP for a-alibaster

Hardrock,
ohhhhh, why did you make me cry....this is too wonderful!! I do not think that any one could write about such a place like you can...I know many who will not even speak of it let alone write...A place hard forgotten, but never spoken.....
I have been buisy, but stoped in to check the new words and find some thing this wonderful..........


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.
LarBear
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19 posted 07-29-2000 10:53 AM       View Profile for LarBear   Email LarBear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LarBear

Hardrock,

Well to tell you the truth, I didnt want to read this one. Cat, told me about it and I was scared to read it. Today I did. Its exactly written how I expected. You already know how I personally feel about our vets, no matter what war or non at all. I love every soldier, including you; that has dedicated there life. Life... in a sence that whats happened to the soldier will carry with them until death. Memories, better forgotten. Events that have shaped the rest of your life, believe me, I do understand. Your poem may help others understand the suffering of our vets.

Very good poem, and thanks for writing it.

Sincerly,
Larry "LarBear"
Martie
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20 posted 11-11-2002 12:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Bump!
Martie
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21 posted 12-31-2005 02:55 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

hi ...just wanted to read this again..it is still remarkable.  I hope that you are well..I miss your poetry!  
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