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AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
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INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE

0 posted 2000-06-21 12:41 PM


There’s a party going on somewhere
I hear the music playing loud
And every time I sing along,
Tears within start flowing down
So I decide to simply stay quiet...
And solve problem with silence
Yet still I hear the music clear
And there goes my favorite song
I cannot seem to stop thinking
The lights are from your house  
But you said that life’s no party
Not without me for that song
I know now you were faking
Just like since months gone by
There’s a party going on, I know where...
You done this for the whole town
I can’t believe you did again
What each time you have done...
The party goes on...somewhere...



If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

© Copyright 2000 AVANTI - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-21 01:40 PM


it seems here there's fun going on and your not aloud to have any and its not fair. i like this poem alot keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-06-21 03:30 PM


Hi, I felt very left out and sad, feeling your poem. How dare life go on without us? Very nice, a place many of us have been, watching the party from afar.
kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
3 posted 2000-06-21 04:21 PM


oh boy this is good.  someone has hurt you badly... how unfair.  the line i can't believe you did again what each time you have done........ simply profound.  i have screamed, whispered, thought and felt that exact same thing.  keep your head up.  love your work avanti.  

kynder

The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson


Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-06-21 08:13 PM


Dog gone it Kynder, you took all my words.
you know Avante, I'm a fighter, when I'm sick I work out the hardest, when I'm left out side a party I crash it, and let them deal with it. I don't push my weight around, but smoothly move into where I want. Or do your own party.
Anyway yes life is a party it might be mine or it might be yours.
enjoyed the read.

Joel


I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-06-21 09:51 PM


It's strange, but I didn't see this as being left out of a physical space.  I saw it as being left out of someone's life, their heart and their love.  To me, it said that someone had moved on, left Avanti behind....left him out of their life....but he could still hear the "music" two entwined hearts make, he could still see the "lights" of a love that pushed out the darkness of dispair in the past.  Guess I'm  a hopeless romantic....I enjoyed it...even if I did project some of my own feelings and experiences into it.  Good work.  Hardock
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
6 posted 2000-06-21 10:51 PM


thank you all for reading and understanding me...you make my day a lot better...
jeremiah, catalinamoon , joel, kynder and hardlock...
you guys have read my feelings that's touched.


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-06-22 08:46 AM


~Avanti,...let me hop in to echo the other's thoughts.  This sounds like it's straight from one's heart...and it's a poem that makes you reflect.  Well done. Take care. *Peace.
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
8 posted 2000-06-22 11:08 PM


thankyou spitFire for reading and I'm glad you liked it...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


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