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Portia
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 157


0 posted 2000-06-20 10:54 PM


some strange disorder
dark, swirling, purple, grey
fog, wind, cloud...

a periodic problem
unnamed, unknown
some weird depression

it sets in unseen,
creeping, so sleek and slow
slithering on airy feet

doctors have names
but you know it is just
a dark, swirling, purple grey

fog, wind, cloud...
that catches you unaware
on a day when you're lonely.


[This message has been edited by Portia (edited 06-20-2000).]

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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-06-20 11:00 PM


~I just read this several times....really slowly..and it's so cool.  Try it. Read it nice and slow and smell every line. Very neat post. That'll do it. Take care. *Peace.
Portia
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 157

2 posted 2000-06-20 11:41 PM


Wow, SF, thank you.
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-06-21 12:13 PM


I did Spit and your right, it does make a diff. this is ?? I just don't know??
it just hit so home to me as you know kid.
Thank you for sharing this.
love ya kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-06-21 12:56 PM


now this a big wow its great and its about what your thinking thanks for shareing with us.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

5 posted 2000-06-21 04:31 AM


I got goosebumps reading this.  Great poem  
Nancee
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 45
Australia
6 posted 2000-06-21 11:42 AM


Peaceful, beautiful nightmares.
For the memories - Thankyou.

gothicmoth
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since 2000-06-05
Posts 89

7 posted 2000-06-21 11:56 AM


The colors seem to have meaning though, suggesting that it is "something."
Nice poem.

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
8 posted 2000-06-21 04:46 PM


Portia.....VERY well done.....I see you have been there...you have to go to see all the colors....and yes, the fog does come and the colors swirl.  Most enjoyable.....thanks for sharing.  Hardrock
JP
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
9 posted 2000-06-22 03:43 PM


Waaayyy cool.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
10 posted 2000-06-22 03:59 PM


very descriptive. well written. really enjoyed the poem.  

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
11 posted 2000-06-26 09:27 PM


i love this. You describe the feeling well. i think many of us have felt exactly what you describe here,and if the rest are like me,have no concept of how to put it into words. this is completely accurate and i'm grateful for the realization of my own thoughts put in words.

swamp


And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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