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Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-06-20 10:01 PM




Frozen in the moment,
my heart sealed in stone.
Knowing beyond a doubt,
I will not survive alone.

I knew I could do this,
but I never wanted to.
Nothing more for me to say,
I'm still waiting for you.

Never saw it coming,
but the feelin's back.
In my heart of hearts,
I detect a crack.

Never thought I'd feel this way,
No God,please not again.
I don't want to be here,
looking at where I've been.

My mind goes to happier times,
shows me how it was.
When I ask you "why?"
I only hear "because."

My heart just wants to stop,
my mind begins to race.
And if we don't get there soon,
you'll kill me with this pace.

I've tried to keep up,
but I am failing fast.            I will always love you,
even at the last.

I can't stop how I feel,
no more than stop the rain.
I only wish I knew,
how to stop your pain.

© Copyright 2000 Click - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-06-20 11:17 PM


~This sort of seems like it just pumped itself right out of your head and heart. It flows and has such a message to it.  Very from the heart of whoever it comes from. Take care. *Peace.
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-06-21 12:09 PM


heck this sound like something right out of my head.
ZOWSERS! Really, I like this style of writing, it's from the heart and soul.
very heartfelt and that's what we try to do,  to reach other souls.
thank you .

Joel

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-06-21 12:53 PM


i love your words, questions, and format great poem for your heart keep it up.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-06-21 05:12 PM


Click..like me, you write in rhyme and meter...great piece of work, good timing and word placement....but it's the soul that comes through all the architecture that makes poetry really good...and you have captured that soul well.  Hardrock
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
5 posted 2000-06-21 05:18 PM


oh click..... the line i detect a crack.  man you are good. i love your work.  gives me hope sometimes.  thanks!!

kynder

A woman to a man is
But a mere chapter,
But a man to a woman
Is an entire book.--
Kynder Howell

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
6 posted 2000-06-23 04:56 PM


Great writing. i really enjoyed this one.....you kinda had to keep reading to find out what it's all about. i like that,adds more suspense or something. excellent.


swampfaeryie

And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

sash
Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125

7 posted 2000-06-23 11:41 PM


Great writing Click! I always knew you had it in you bud. Sorry You are in so much pain right now...Sometimes there's just not enough fruit salad in the world...


      Your Friend,

          Sash

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