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Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-06-19 07:37 PM




In the darkness,her arms enfold me.
She smells nothing like you!

Her cool kisses rain upon my lips and brow.
Not with the warmth you always showed.

My mind recoils,but my body submits.
In that dark room, she whispers,
a name that I do not know.

When we are done,she pushes me away.
She doesn't hold me,like you always did.

She does not tell me,the things only you can say.
She cares not that I tremble and weep.

In the cold embrace,of one I do not know.
I'm so alone.
Where is the one I have always loved??
< !signature-->

             Click



[This message has been edited by Click (edited 06-19-2000).]

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Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-06-19 07:57 PM


A cold lover is the worst, but wanting that someone special back has ?? got to be the end of us.

great pain and feeling within this kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
2 posted 2000-06-19 08:01 PM


Thanx,Joel, I knew you'd get it.

Click

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-19 08:03 PM


~What a lack of compassion on the "She" part....portrayed well.  The receiver of this has got to hurt...and the longing for the true love is a heartbreaker....wow...great poem. hehe. Take care. *Peace.
Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2000-06-19 08:28 PM


Wow, deep and painful!!  Well Written!!

Bridgette  


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown


Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
5 posted 2000-06-20 02:21 AM


the meaning here is so clear. i think at one point in life everyone longs for some person back because the one there with does not compare. great poem i find my heart in this one keep it up.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-06-20 05:21 AM


I remember when I broke up with my first wife...not my choice..and I compared other women to her for about two years..they could never measure up to her...finally I started seeing the beauty that they alone possessed...each has her own beauty..perhaps we just need to let go of the past to find the beauty of this moment....James
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
7 posted 2000-06-20 02:20 PM


   I can feel the absence of love in your poem. Not alone, but oh so lonely. I know the feeling well.
Sandra

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
8 posted 2000-06-20 02:35 PM


Wow!! Nice read here.  Brings back so many memories for me.  The coldness of the touch, yet longing for ur true love. Hmmmm thanx for this one friend!

Peace
< !signature-->

So afraid to love you
More affraid to lose
Clinging to a past that doesnt let me choose
Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhhh you gave me light!

[This message has been edited by Dark_kisses_Within (edited 06-20-2000).]

E. Benjamin Roy
Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12

9 posted 2000-06-20 05:04 PM


The cold embrace of a cold lover is like death...wanted, yet unwanted all at the same time.

Darkness is the key to many things, but beware of what you seek...

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
10 posted 2000-06-21 05:03 PM


Oh yeah....been there, done that....got the heartache for it....and they don't give t-shirts.  Nice poem.....brought back some memories.  Thanks.....Hardrock
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
11 posted 2000-06-21 11:34 PM


you know you really got me on this one.  i have used sex for love so many times.  i fear it will happen again.  do you by any chance share these words with her??  is she so far gone that she can't see your abiding love for her?   i hope not.  forgiveness is the key to love.  keep it up.  love your work, click.

kynder

A woman to a man is
But a mere chapter,
But a man to a woman
Is an entire book.--
Kynder Howell

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