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Allstaria22
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 83
MN USA

0 posted 2000-06-18 07:30 PM


my little friend
my helper
my biggest comfort
so small
so intimidating
help me stop
needing
wanting
longing
for the release
you give me
you have control
over my whole life
you need to destroy
me
i love you
i hate you
help me stop
you call to me
i fall again
into the
unbearable
pit of need
help me stop
a pill
a smoke
a drink
a man
silently killing me
slowly
totally
help me stop.



Isaiah 1:18
"Everyone loves a rose, will you be thankful for the thorns?"

© Copyright 2000 Dana Edmond - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-18 08:36 PM


this is different but I like it. I hope to read more of your work. so if you like keep posting some here.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-06-18 09:24 PM


Here is your stop sign. I guess so many have this habbit and is killing people every day. what a terable loss to humans.

this hits the heart of it.
a good post.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-18 09:42 PM


~Silently killing me...slowly.  THAT is killing ME.  That line hurts to read.  As Joel has said,...it IS a loss,...a terrible one.  Take care. *Peace.

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

4 posted 2000-06-19 06:26 AM


Powerful poem.  I like the way you have written it - short lines... in a way it gives a poem so much more depth.  Take care.
Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
5 posted 2000-06-20 07:31 AM


I like the style you wrote this and for what it's worth, the only one who can make it stop is you.
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