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Thicker Skin |
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FJiznit Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 24 |
Lying in this bed I've made It's all too easy to give in This place of rest to be my grave Once despair sets in But I must rise and shed the lies That haunt me in my sleep The ties that bind my hands and mind Won't stop me being free If I can find the heart, to walk the path Into the bleak unknown Maybe words of war, will hurt no more Though I face the night alone No more a man, than a child Now I've seen what lies within Closed doors and denial, my life on trial Playing the game, I could never win Now I see with open eyes I care not what tomorrow brings I'll break down the walls I hide behind I've grown a thicker skin |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
truely great work. like the format and imagery you use. i find dark things easier to use to get a point across I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This poem was beautifully done! You seem to have much guilt. If I can find the heart, to walk the path Into the bleak unknown Maybe words of war, will hurt no more Though I face the night alone I like this stanza in particular. It sounds like you're hitting a rut in your life right now. But "...face the night..." and it will pass. We are the hollow men We are the stuffed men Leaning together Headpiece filled with straw. Alas! Our dried voices, when We whisper together Are quiet and meaningless As wind in dry grass Or rats' feet over broken glass In our dry cellar Shape without form, shade without color, Paralyzed force, gesture without motion; --T.S. Eliot |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
But I must rise and shed the lies That haunt me in my sleep The ties that bind my hands and mind Won't stop me being free I can relate. Beautifully written! the rhythm kept me reading, and the description is great. Very high calibur poem. Great work. "Suicides have already betrayed the body. Still born, they don't always die, bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet that even children would |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Yes thicker skin, we all need. we do make our own beds, and we can rise up to make life what we want. and breaking down our walls to began a new. great job on this display of words. simply great. Joel I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Excellent work my dear Friend! You have such a way of expressing urself. Now tell me this........ does thicker skin help protect urself from the pain? Is so then.... doesnt it stop urself from being loved altogether? Just a thought on my part  Peace I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
I love this and the way you have expressed your innerself and fears!! Lovely!! Reminds me of a poem that I posted a couple of weeks ago called..."Skinless" Thank you for a grand read this morning!! There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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FJiznit Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 24 |
Thanks for the encouragement guy's, it means a lot. |
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