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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-06-18 01:28 AM


  I drove you hard and cold
  Until the final days were
           Sold
Stole from this special place
   Remembered by some but,
      Never replaced


I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul


© Copyright 2000 E'Val - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-06-18 12:18 PM


an interesting poem, I loved the first line "I drove you hard and cold". really enjoyed your poem.

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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ChibiDeathscythe
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

2 posted 2000-06-18 02:39 PM


Small in size, but makes an impact. Wonderfull ending. I like the rhythm.

"Suicides have already betrayed the body.
Still born, they don't always die,
bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet
that even children would

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

3 posted 2000-06-18 04:51 PM


the first line drew me in., I really liked this

Kathleen

"How do I love thee? Let
me count the ways.
I love thee to the depth and breadth and height
My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight
For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning



kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
4 posted 2000-06-19 12:33 PM


great work here.  i like the never replaced.  no they never are.  

kynder

The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson

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