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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
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Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-06-18 01:04 AM


        A poem is like a tree.
it takes and takes, needs and needs
  An when a branch breaks it bleeds
                And
     Loses part of it's honesty
Calls for grief and sorrow, but all is
           Better tomorrow

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul


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taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-06-18 01:08 AM


Jeremiah, this is a fantastic poem!   Yes, poetry is a bit like that isn't it?!  Hmm.. although sometimes I don't know whether "all is better tomorrow"    Terrific work!
hunter
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 22
lex,ky
2 posted 2000-06-18 02:33 AM


What you say about the breaking is true,but will it be better tomorrow?who knows.you must live for today for tomorrow may never come.goodwork
fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

3 posted 2000-06-18 02:45 AM


hm.  Impressive writing.  Do you often read proverbs?  This is a lot like a proverb.  
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