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Portia
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 157


0 posted 2000-06-17 12:10 PM


well here it is, a full moon
and I am alone again

*chuckle*

you reap what you sow, as they say
I forgot to light a candle...
I imagine it will be just as good tomorrow

oh, you're hearing this dusty old cackle
but I am fluttering a beautiful
throaty laugh, a young toy
women throw around in their youth.
something largely unappreciated, I will tell you.

for it is a laugh that makes or breaks a woman

don't believe me?

oh it's never that way with a man
(unless his laugh--

*laugh*

--is truly unbearable)
but a woman could almost live or die on
the way she breaks a smile.

have another cookie.
it will be a long time before
you realize what I'm talking about.

© Copyright 2000 Portia - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-06-17 10:57 AM


May I have a glass of milk with my cookie??
Interesting piece you have written here. Must give this some deeper thought!
nice style and theme!
dh

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-06-17 12:36 PM


Well it's been a long time and I've eaten all the cookies and I know what your talking about.
love it.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
3 posted 2000-06-17 03:30 PM


Hey, I remember the aunt! Are these real episodes, or do you invent them? I like the laugh theory, interesting one that ... I wish I had an inspiring aunt  

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Portia
Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157

4 posted 2000-06-17 03:42 PM


Smile, thanks Lotharingia. She is kind of a fictional amalgam of several people, including the one I want to be when I grow up. This one was a little more scattered than I intended, but the Aunt kind of takes on a life of her own when I write her out. They aren't real episodes... yet. Give me about 40 years.
Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
5 posted 2000-06-18 03:04 PM


i like the type of story line like a wise old woman telling a young kid about life but as much as she tells them they still won't understand until they get older great work i love it.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

6 posted 2000-07-17 07:18 PM


Portia - awesome...

again.

K

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
7 posted 2000-07-20 10:22 AM


Portia..I look forward to each episode with the old aunt.  She has such pearls of wisdom.  Thanks for creating her...she lives because of you....and will live forever now.  Hardrock
Magebeast
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

8 posted 2000-07-20 12:52 PM


*scratches his head* I can't say I understood it all, but I liked it anyway.  Keep up the excellent work.
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