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Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-06-16 06:09 PM




When I asked you,
"Do you love me?"
and got no reply,
I felt the stars,
fall from the sky.

I heard the music,
die in my soul.

When I asked again,
"Well, can you ever?"
and you said "No."
I felt the thread,
binding us let go.

I saw my hopes,
spin out of control.

I think I know,
just what you feel.
You are so unsure,
is this for real?

I sense the doubt,
I feel it too!

I want to share,
all that we are.
Love you up close,
and not from afar!

I think you'll see,
I only want you!

I'll ask you again,
maybe you'll say "Yes!"
I think I've lost,
that's only a guess!


  Click

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Lonelypoet
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123
Conklin,NY,USA
1 posted 2000-06-16 07:07 PM


Good poem, reminds me of me(lol) keep up the good work.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-06-16 07:37 PM


This was wonderful images here hon, it hurts when forever ever reason they believe you are not good enough, I know, we all do....
*hugs*  Great work  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-06-17 12:21 PM


God I know this feeling so well.
I've asked her so many times, do you love me with no responce.
and to know that you have already lost, is almost to much. to a one true love.

you have expressed it so well here.
thanks kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-06-17 03:39 PM


How sad it is when we love someone and they don't feel the same ... But that's the way love is, you can't switch it on and off at will. Very well done!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Nancee
Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45
Australia
5 posted 2000-06-18 12:51 PM


The book is the same, only the pages change...
freeze my flicking fingers...

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-06-18 01:09 AM


I know this feeling myself time and time over and the question still goe's unanswered.
we'll i guess being hurt when giving your heart out is worse then not giving it out and being hurt we'll at least its that way for me.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul


hunter
Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 22
lex,ky
7 posted 2000-06-18 01:54 AM


i can understand your words for i feel them too.
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