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moshpit
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since 1999-11-25
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cebu, philippines

0 posted 2000-06-13 08:26 AM


Alone, I sit here still
while the stars above--they shine
biding their time exquisitely
as I dream of things, once mine.

Do the stars know of pain and yearning?
of dreams left for dead?
Do they know of never-ending silences?

Oblivious, yet constantly vicinal--
they glide endlessly in the evening darkness,
tainting the sky with patches of hope,
and momentary spells of gladness.

But, for me, forever they remain
distant--aloof, invariably far.
The best things in life aren't always free,
The worst things are.


© Copyright 2000 guile canencia - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-06-13 03:24 PM


The best things in life aren't always free,
The worst things are.

I believe you may be right about that. I don't think that the stars know of pain. I think they are free souls soaring in a celestial sky of bliss ( good line, might use that in a poem). anyway a wonderful poem.  

Oblivious, yet constantly vicinal--
they glide endlessly in the evening darkness,
tainting the sky with patches of hope,
and momentary spells of gladness.

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

manic street preachers
"Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair"

"I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP

"And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity
Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see
And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway
It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper.

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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
2 posted 2000-06-13 03:28 PM


I've often thought about the stars myself...I have a poem in one of my journals about them....but anywayz....this was an excellent read. You've displayed your thoughts and feelings very well in this.  

                                 D.E.


 Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't.

~*Angel of Darkness*~

"So what are we, helpless? Puppets? No, the big moments are gonna come...you can't help that. It's what you do afterwards that counts. That's when you find out who you really are. You'll see what I mean..." -Whistler

*+Daughter of Darkness+*


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-06-13 08:14 PM


Fav quote:  "Are the stars just pinholes in the curtain of night?"
We know that are, planets, dead moons etc etc.
BUT we can imagine they are long gone souls like in the 'Lion King' cartoon/kids movie and then if they are old souls they do indeed sympathesize with us!  When hurting I like to look at the stars myself, sort of brings things back into perspective...
Great work  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



gothicmoth
Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89

4 posted 2000-06-13 08:21 PM


This was a nice twist to a subject that a lot is written about. Poignant and thought-provoking. Oh and I enjoyed it too.
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