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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Footsteps in the sand... Why do I see four instead of two? Burdened with the irony of life Faith wounded and scarred What am I to do? Troubles and tribulations? Life's meaning is lost in dreams Begging for answers and miracles Wanting her back A fool, I am, it seems Shown the way back This is not an option to take Please listen to my prayers I'll love her forever Help me before it's too late Footsteps in the sand... I still see four? Exhausted, lost, and confused Won't give up for my love Want to be with her forever more Footsteps in the sand...? |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey there,...ok first, great post. I am not going to get too deep in my reply but perhaps an angel walks with you. I admire your dedication to your love and think your writing to hold much strength and talent. Thank you for sharing it. Take care. *Peace. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
ya know, just this weekend i was at the beach, wishing my two solitary steps had two accompanying steps next to it. boy can i relate... excellent work here!! welcome fellow poet!!! kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wow! Great piece. The footsteps symbolising your solitude. Well done!!!  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Allstaria22 Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 83MN USA |
Loved the poem. what happened to this love? loneliness sucks.. but it can also help us to grow. Dana Isaiah 1:18 "Everyone loves a rose, will you be thankful for the thorns?" |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I, too loved this one. Love the way you express your longing for your lost love, your despair (or if it's not you, then the person in the poem) with the use of the footsteps. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i actually based this poem on the story "footsteps in the sand" the story was about a person asking Jesus why is it that he noticed that in good times he sees four footsteps, but when in troubled times he only saw two. he thought that Jesus abandoned him during that time. But Jesus told him that the 2 footsteps that he saw where actually His and that He was carrying the guy thru troubled times. i want Him upstairs to see that i still see the four footsteps in this times when i'm really very troubled. i haven't lost my faith in Him, but why does He just stay at my side and not carry me thru my troubled times. i don't want Him to lead me back cause the only thing i want in life now is to be back with my love or nothing. i've been begging but still....no answer. i love this girl so much that even though she's not around, i pray that when she has to go thru troubles and hurt, i offer myself to go thru it instead of her. i pray that when she goes for her operation for wolf parkinson's white soon, if it's her time, for the Lord not to take her and i offer my life instead of her. as i said in my other poem. Prayers left on deaf ears..... i love your interpretations though, i do  thanks all for your kindness [This message has been edited by acire (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey there,...when I said "angel",...that is sort of what I meant...I thought that I knew what you were getting at but didn't want to come out and say it. I took it as you knowing that although you appeared to be the only one walking there,...that you still knew that you weren't alone. Which,...you aren't. Good to see your faith beside you. This was a great piece. Take care of you. *Peace. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
acire, a wonderful poem, clever thoughts, I believe that some one does walk with us through our life that we are never truely alone. excellent poem. Footsteps in the sand... I still see four? Exhausted, lost, and confused Won't give up for my love Want to be with her forever more Footsteps in the sand...? ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Despite the fact that this was posted quite a while ago, it still doesn't take away from how much you have come in the way of writing. The comparison between this and twilights serenade is something amazing. Your words here are still as thought provoking as they are now. But you don't post for us anymore and that's sad. I really like this. Be proud you.  ~AF~ Someone handed me a gun the other day and told me to shoot. At what? Anything that makes me want to kill myself. I aimed the gun at my head and shot. |
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