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Acies
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0 posted 06-12-2000 05:38 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Acies


Footsteps in the sand...
Why do I see four instead of two?
Burdened with the irony of life
Faith wounded and scarred
What am I to do?

Troubles and tribulations?
Life's meaning is lost in dreams
Begging for answers and miracles
Wanting her back
A fool, I am, it seems

Shown the way back
This is not an option to take
Please listen to my prayers
I'll love her forever
Help me before it's too late

Footsteps in the sand...
I still see four?
Exhausted, lost, and confused
Won't give up for my love
Want to be with her forever more

Footsteps in the sand...?

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1 posted 06-12-2000 05:43 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Hey there,...ok first, great post.  I am not going to get too deep in my reply but perhaps an angel walks with you.  I admire your dedication to your love and think your writing to hold much strength and talent. Thank you for sharing it. Take care. *Peace.
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2 posted 06-12-2000 07:02 PM       View Profile for kynder   Email kynder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kynder

ya know, just this weekend i was at the beach, wishing my two solitary steps had two accompanying steps next to it.  boy can i relate...  excellent work here!! welcome fellow poet!!!

kynder

  The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson
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3 posted 06-12-2000 07:48 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wow!  Great piece.  The footsteps symbolising your solitude.  Well done!!!  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
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4 posted 06-12-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for Allstaria22   Email Allstaria22   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allstaria22

Loved the poem. what happened to this love? loneliness sucks.. but it can also help us to grow.

Dana

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5 posted 06-13-2000 06:20 AM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

I, too loved this one. Love the way you express your longing for your lost love, your despair (or if it's not you, then the person in the poem) with the use of the footsteps.

 Lotharingia
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6 posted 06-13-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

i actually based this poem on the story "footsteps in the sand"
the story was about a person asking Jesus why is it that he noticed that in good times he sees four footsteps, but when in troubled times he only saw two.  he thought that Jesus abandoned him during that time.  But Jesus told him that the 2 footsteps that he saw where actually His and that He was carrying the guy thru troubled times.

i want Him upstairs to see that i still see the four footsteps in this times when i'm really very troubled. i haven't lost my faith in Him, but why does He just stay at my side and not carry me thru my troubled times.  i don't want Him to lead me back cause the only thing i want in life now is to be back with my love or nothing. i've been begging but still....no answer. i love this girl so much that even though she's not around, i pray that when she has to go thru troubles and hurt, i offer myself to go thru it instead of her. i pray that when she goes for her operation for wolf parkinson's white soon, if it's her time, for the Lord not to take her and i offer my life instead of her.
as i said in my other poem.  Prayers left on deaf ears.....

i love your interpretations though, i do  
thanks all for your kindness

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 06-13-2000).]
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~Hey there,...when I said "angel",...that is sort of what I meant...I thought that I knew what you were getting at but didn't want to come out and say it.  I took it as you knowing that although you appeared to be the only one walking there,...that you still knew that you weren't alone.  Which,...you aren't.  Good to see your faith beside you.  This was a great piece. Take care of you. *Peace.
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8 posted 06-13-2000 03:08 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

acire, a wonderful poem, clever thoughts, I believe that some one does walk with us through our life that we are never truely alone. excellent poem.  

Footsteps in the sand...
I still see four?
Exhausted, lost, and confused
Won't give up for my love
Want to be with her forever more

Footsteps in the sand...?


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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

manic street preachers
"Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair"

"I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP

"And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity
Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see
And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway
It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper.

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9 posted 08-14-2001 10:43 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Despite the fact that this was posted quite a while ago, it still doesn't take away from how much you have come in the way of writing. The comparison between this and twilights serenade is something amazing. Your words here are still as thought provoking as they are now. But you don't post for us anymore and that's sad. I really like this. Be proud you.  

~AF~

Someone handed me a gun the other day and told me to shoot. At what? Anything that makes me want to kill myself. I aimed the gun at my head and shot.

 
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