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Broken Heart |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738
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As I was crossing the street I saw you. Saw you Put your hand in hers Put your lips Close to her ear Smooth her hair down. I cried out My heart broke No-one heard me No-one saw the pieces shatter. You didn't notice She didn't notice You just went on strolling. I stood there Near the middle of the road I got knocked over My heart was truly broken. Now you don't have to worry About me Anymore. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You captured this emotion very well in this piece about just how damaging a broken heart can be to every ounce of your being. But don't worry...this pain will ease with time and your knowledge and strengths growing with this experience. D.E. Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
Great poem! I know the feeling there. Let nature guide your soul. Follow the path that nature gives. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh ouch...this is so heartfelt...so painful to read. An emotional release as I see it...keep writing...helps for me and you are good. Take care. *Peace. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Yes. That hurts so bad, a terrible thing, and expressed so well. I especially like the line "I got knocked down", it says so much. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
taramw great work here... the emotion is so evident keep it up and you'll find the amazing positiveness of the written release |
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tac Junior Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 28New Jersey |
There is nothing more painful than the realization that it is truly over. That all hope is finally gone. Very well said... I could feel the emotion, it's like you want him to pick up the pieces as you lay there shattered (yet you just want to lay there feeling sorry for yourself because you know he doesn't care), but no one can see what just happened, no one can truly feel that moment, except you. I am going through a similar situation, yet different. You expressed it so much better than I though.(See Pain is Stronger than Love) |
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