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taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738


0 posted 2000-06-10 11:14 AM



a longing
to sit with you
to laugh
talk
cry
dream
of what used to be.

but you
don't want those things.

i sit
in silent misery
while you stare
at the tv
or a book.

a silent plea
what have i done?
what didn't i do?

© Copyright 2000 Tara - All Rights Reserved
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
1 posted 2000-06-10 12:02 PM


You just want to reach out and touch and it sounds like this person just doesn't want to be touched in any way, like they're reserved from you and the world.  I know how this feels. Good job expressing yourself here.

Joy

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
2 posted 2000-06-10 12:32 PM


Communication breakdown, huh? A love gone sour. I too have been there, a horrible, frustrating thing. Good for losing weight though!  

 Uta Lotharingia
"Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn"
Raoul Hausmann

tac
Junior Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 28
New Jersey
3 posted 2000-06-10 01:48 PM


This is exactly what I was feeling for so long. I can find no answers. I felt helpless.

I went to the next step and found someone to fill that void.

I guess I have been there too long, and I can't make a new relationship work. It is very painful.

 

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-06-11 12:57 PM


You live with them but are still alone.....Known these feelings well myself.
Great work  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



kitkat
Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
5 posted 2000-06-11 08:55 PM


I hear the feeling in this piece. First off, do not blame yourself. Second do not just sit there!! Go out and live.
e-mail if ya wanna talk about it. I will listen.

sweetthing61401
New Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 8

6 posted 2000-06-11 09:08 PM


I went through the same experience with my last boyfriend. Finally I came to my senses and got on with my life. I realized that he didn't really love me and that I had alot of living to do and didn't need someone like him dragging me down
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2000-06-11 10:21 PM


With 200 years of wisdom under my belt (oh, it's tight) I know that sometimes when you aren't getting response you need you try to change the other person, when sometimes you only need to change yourself.
speaking for myself mind you, it brought about tremendous results!




 Kathleen

"How do I love thee? Let
me count the ways.
I love thee to the depth and breadth and height
My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight
For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning


taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

8 posted 2000-06-12 07:18 AM


Thank you everyone for your kind words.  A poem from the heart - which all of you have realised.  Thanks for caring  
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
9 posted 2000-06-14 11:51 AM


yes kid I to have said this many times before
as she sit watching tv. what a dredful life.
I changed it, and now much better off.
my heart out to you kid. take it and fly.

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Cowgirl Jane
New Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 8

10 posted 2000-06-15 02:30 PM


I must add to the long list of sad testimonials!  Because I have been in this situation as well.  It stinks, don't it?  You have clearly hit a human nerve.  Very effective.

Cowgirl Jane

Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
11 posted 2000-06-15 09:45 PM


Powerful writing!!
   It moved me!!

     I know how it feels.
                       Thanks.

  Click

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