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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Gone Thoughts that are a dreamer's net. Cast into the days sunset. Held fast by kismet. Of heart and brawn she was born. And baptized around the horn. She was lusty spawn. Stood the oceans rage as few. And only she and I knew The many of her coup. Named and called the Honey Bee. Mistress of the mortal me Lost, downed, lost at sea. My mind rides before her mast Ever splicing waters past Till my bones are cast. Her heart was given to the sea Her brawn shriven the mind to free. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I cannot put my finger on exactly what it is about this piece, but such a picture before me, as only you can paint. I think this one deserves to be cherished...and when I find the reason, I'll share it with you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW...great piece of writing  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
I do not know what the poem is actually about, but it's surely a good piece, great work. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
great work... well written If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ The ship's upon the ocean floor but the aquatic ghosts bubble to the surface of memory. Wonderful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Vaporous One Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 35 |
I liked the first and fifth stanzas very much; wonderful imagery. The second stanza seemed a little weak, though. And the rhyme that you kept up so well throughout kinda faltered here. But overall, a very nice piece. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all of the above, my sincere thanks for the read and vote. |
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