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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-07-27 08:48 PM



Misspent youth with passions ebbing
lives lived in a cold, hostile dread
lies shrouded in sacred vows given
truth left hidden in words unsaid.

A cold passion in battles waged
while children became the prize
enduring pawns to warrior parents
not knowing which one to despise.

Years of agony and the battle raged
no victory for either side
peace will reign in the house of war
only when the combatants have died.

When did the line ‘tween love and hate
get so battered and so muddied
Who gave the signal to the battle join
who was first, beaten and bloodied.

Tormented love, triumphant hate
joined in wedlock profane
finding battles won or lost
in wretched delight, victorious pain.




[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 07-30-2000).]

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ethome
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1 posted 2000-07-27 08:59 PM


It's so sad Poet deVine that these situations exist, what a terrible way to begin life with an example set for children like that. I think you put your point across extremely well in this piece.....

This fine verse where you are using these kinds of oxymoron statements really show the futility of the situation but also display your skills as a writer


"Tormented love, triumphant hate
joined in wedlock profane
fighting battles won or lost
in wretched delight. victorious pain."

Take care...........ethome........

ethome
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2 posted 2000-07-27 09:01 PM


I always forget this I get so involved in the work........click..
Denise
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3 posted 2000-07-27 09:16 PM


I remember this one well, Sharon. So true for so many. Well written.

Denise

Heather Miller
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4 posted 2000-07-27 10:16 PM


Very good work. I loved the title.
got a vote from me too.......
hugs,
Heather< !signature-->

Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no wonderful memeries to cherish.
With love it brings hurts and with hurts it brings bittersweet memories


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WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
5 posted 2000-07-28 10:23 AM


Can't say that I remember this one. But you've drawn the picture well! It's sad when it comes down to this. Especially for the children.

You've done a great writing here Sharon!

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
6 posted 2000-07-28 11:35 AM


Years of agony and the battle raged
no victory for either side
peace will reign in the house of war
only when the combatants have died.
...
...
Tormented love, triumphant hate
joined in wedlock profane
finding battles won or lost
in wretched delight, victorious pain.
------
WOW Poet deVine, what expression.... Excellently written... painful it is though... but to this reader, the pleasure of seeing perfection is joyous... how ironic!

regards,
sudhir

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2000-07-28 11:47 AM


This poem has special meaning for me. It was a challenge poem on another site and was the first time I had a chance to challenge Ron! The phrase - tormented love, triumphant hate - had to be used in a poem. It was amazing the different poems that were written! Thanks for your kind words.

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michellemckee
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 49
Tucson, AZ
8 posted 2000-07-28 01:41 PM


Very deep poem! The feeling and response it arouses for me is a sense of deja vu, having grown up in this house! I can say without reservation that you have captured the grim battle in a marriage without love.
You have my vote!

Life is not a spectator Sport!
Dance like no one's watching.
Love like it's never going to hurt.

Fred Hobbs
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since 1999-06-08
Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US
9 posted 2000-07-28 02:11 PM


Nice work Sharon.  You described the process so well.  Got my vote too.

fh

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
10 posted 2000-07-28 02:20 PM


Sharon, I love this. So true and sad,for so many.
Sandra

RainbowGirl
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11 posted 2000-07-28 04:33 PM


I can't think of a worse scenario than a child being brought up to know only bickering and very little true love and affection but it happens all the time and yet if adults only realised that what they seek they refuse their children...makes no sense to me..

Challenge or not, the words are well worth hearing..

HUSG

"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost;
that is where they should be.
Now put the foundations under them."


Parker
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ON
12 posted 2000-07-28 04:41 PM


Wonderful, glad I found it. Its very devine... vote.

Parker

tracie66
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13 posted 2000-07-29 07:18 AM


This is so very well expressed..very sad indeed but very well written.
Hugs
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Marge Tindal
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14 posted 2000-07-29 09:56 AM


PoetdeVine~
Wow, my friend !
A battle I'd never want to be drawn into -
as we all know ...
there are no victors !

Clearly defined visuals, my dear.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Vaporous One
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since 2000-07-27
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15 posted 2000-07-29 11:19 AM


I know this story much too well; it touched me. Thank you.  
Hardrock
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16 posted 2000-07-29 08:54 PM


PdV..I'm not usually in this forum..and it is obvious I have missed something.  I had lots of words to respond with but Michellmckee took them.  Outstanding poem here.  Hardrock
Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
17 posted 2000-07-30 11:37 AM


how often do we hear the phrase
'just like his dad' or 'so much like her mom'
It's not always an influence ... but it hits awfully close to home at times

Rex

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
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Blue Heaven
18 posted 2000-07-30 08:10 PM


You have captured one of the great tragedies of modern warfare. I am so thankful that I was at least able to avoid this. If more parents would think first of their children they would see life in a different light. Outstanding writing PDV. Truly.< !signature-->



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".  




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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
19 posted 2000-07-31 02:34 AM


Very well written about a tough subject
Excellent work
Liz

Jon Mewett
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Posts 1304

20 posted 2000-07-31 11:55 AM


Ther is a certian tension in that title.
You carried that tension all the way through this poem DV........I like this one a lot.

Jon

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
21 posted 2000-07-31 04:12 PM


it is a sad situation for a child...here to testify...     

good job on a rotten subject!  you almost made this look beautiful!

dg

"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
22 posted 2000-08-01 04:18 AM


Glad I caught this. One of my favorites Sharon.

Chris

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
23 posted 2000-08-03 07:00 AM


I am glad Ron gave a last call for votes... otherwise I might have missed this...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

24 posted 2000-08-06 01:47 PM


oh i cant believe i missed this awesome
poem...
excellent Sharon!!!!!!
so glad I double checked all these back pages
hope to see this in the book
jm

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
25 posted 2000-08-07 10:22 PM


Up you go---- this one really deserves a spot



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



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