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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon 
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Spirits of the night Here against your silhouette, The reed stems dance, Like the spirits of the night, Heralding your presence. Here you hear my heart, In a palpitating trance, Like ripples hastily depart, A trip to the Heavens. Here your eyes release, A lustrous blue glance, That brings my soul to peace, Resting in silence. Here two swans span wings, To head to their plans, Smiling I pack up my things, Knowing love blossoms. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Wow! What a touching piece & beautifully written  |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Beautiful, just beautiful. Bonnie |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Wonderful, just wonderful  LITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
this was definitely an interesting format, it felt sort of like a long haiku  neato ~H |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
In the immortal words of Ed Sullivan... ah-wunnerful--ahwunnerful Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Here against your silhouette, The reed stems dance, Like the spirits of the night, Heralding your presence. Here you hear my heart, In a palpitating trance, Like ripples hastily depart, A trip to the Heavens. ================= this is stunning... absoltely graceful the emotions are as perfect as the imagery wonderful writing I will have to look for more of your work take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Thank you, lady lost, Bsc, Heather, Jamie, Angel and Janet for your kind comments.. I will submit this to the critical analysis poems in the mean time.. I just feel that the last stanza doesn't feel too right to me. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
love it the way it is. don't change a thing. beautiful verse. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
^_^ I like this.. actually it is quite different from most of your other poetry James.. I love the first stanza.. I'll comment in the other forum, k? ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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