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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
She didn’t cry when you died instead, she waded far out into the salty sea filling her belly with the bitter taste of each unpredictable wave, as it came crashing down upon her. The hot flames of the unforgiving sun, singed her hair, burning holes in her eyes as she drifted aimlessly with the tide, headed in no particular direction. Finally, when the days turned into years, there was nothing left of her but fragile bones, floating on the surface of the rough water and her heart, laying in the cold dark abyss below. |
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Geoffrey Sonnen Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142Reading, PA USA |
"My Heart Will Go On". Very sad and a well written allegory. My Heart goes out to you if this is a reality to you. Peace and Love to you, Geoffrey |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Thanks Geoffrey! No, this is not about me, but written about a someone that I dearly love. Debbie |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow... Debbie - what a quality this has - of sadness, and loss. Well written.  K |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Deb.. oh oh.. lying in the abyss below.. yes. it's very touching... a pleasure to read... - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
This was so painful... to simply get eaten by the sea like that...and not even breathe a word... sad...but well written If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Vivid imagery. I loved it much. Thanks, Pete |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
wow what a poem. really good images here. makes me sad to see someone feeling so blue. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh, what a tragically beautiful piece. Loved it. Bonnie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Debbie, the sadness was heartfelt... regards, sudhir |
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