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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Silent Sweeps I speak to her in mental sweeps, In savory signs and silent leaps. An ambience of muted cries, But into emptiness it flies. I seek a traffic with her mind. A whispered touch of subtle kind And wait to see the dawning light, That little bird of innate sight. An inkling of the smallest reap Would moist my eyes to tear in weep One fleeting trace of silent sound. To send an echo of rebound. This dove I send in hungry chase Transcending life in whispered grace Has driven me to near despair This bell I dare, she does not share. So tolls my bell, my soul in swell Ringing herein my soundless hell. |
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danny Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 18 |
MY FAVOURITE STYLE AND WRITTEN WITH GRACE AND TRUE FEELING. IT FELT LIKE A PERSONAL POEM A PLEASURE TO READ. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
good one seymour |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ My gosh ! This is EXQUISITE ! 'I seek a traffic with her mind. A whispered touch of subtle kind' 'I seek a traffic with her mind.' ? ? ? My God, that's brilliant ! Poet - you are OUTSTANDING ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Danny, Thank you. Robert, Thanks for the vote. Marge, My God you are terrific. *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
An inkling of the smallest reap Would moist my eyes to tear in weep One fleeting trace of silent sound. To send an echo of rebound. This dove I send in hungry chase Transcending life in whispered grace Has driven me to near despair This bell I dare, she does not share. So tolls my bell, my soul in swell Ringing herein my soundless hell. ----------------- Sy this is ...EXCEPTIONAL writing this is outstanding, perfect, excellent and just so cool this is one of my favs of your now ONE...to many to single out tho I could eat the rhyme in this with a spoon the wisdom and creative and unique lines in this are simply awesome... I do so love the way your poetic mind works  later-tasty-rhyme-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
One of your best.... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Excellence as always.  I enjoyed this very much. It is good to read wonderful rhyming poetry since I can't write it myself. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Symour~ A most wonderful read. very well written Tracie~  Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful composition Seymour. So well timed and rhymed. What a great topic...fear of rejection...it's a killer, so well done! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW, what a wonderful piece of work from you seymour.... indredible piece, had a most interesting read... Seymour... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Thank you gator gal. *L* Mike, Thank you. Temptress, A tempting comment. Thanks Tracie, Many thanks. Ethrome, Thank you my friend. Sudhir, Love your comments. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
{~,^} Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Very good Sy. I really like the couplet form and this is very well done. Thanks, Pete |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dear Sy, I believe this is one of your very best, though there are many that could vie for that position, but the phrases from beginning to end are axtrordinary. My personal poetic "Sy"smograph reads 10 on this one. Must be earth shattering. Liz |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is beautiful, and powerful in its beauty...humbly voting for this one |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Still don't know what {~,^} means But thanks for the vote. Not a poet, Thank you for the vote and nice comment. Elizabeth, From a poetess of your standing you have my humble thanks. Love Sy Corazon, Thank to so much for the vote. |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Amazing, simply amazing. Bonnie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BSC, My last chance to say thank you for the vote. |
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